Loved this!'l

Haha! I enjoyed this.

I m out of here

LOL! I laughed so much I had to stop reading and refocus! Seriously, this was SOOOOOO funny, crackfit!

I so wanna see pokemon make them in a couple!

LOLZ You're so phunee! This one-shot is a work of art. Love It!

'Is this a dream? I pinch my arm. Ow! Nope. Not a dream. Hallelujah!' HAHAHA! That's my favorite bit!

that is sooo cool can you make it not a one shot? I would love 2 c how it works between may anddrew

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This is very humorous and probably too fluffy than I should have digested, lawl. But just a head-ups, don't add redundant adjectives. Example:

"He stands up out of his chair and flicks his chartreuse hair out of his emerald green eyes."

LOL emerald green eyes? It would have been just fine if you had just used one of the other. Same with "chocolate brown eyes."

Chika H.~

you disabled annonymous reviews too? Christ.

Criticism

1: Ranting much?

2: almost all of the characters are out of character.

3: this should be rated T.

No promises for this contest

This was brilliant! I loved the ending when Paul says all those things to her...cute! :DDDDDDDDDDD

( This review has been typed on a phine, therefore I am sorry for any confusing spelling errors ).

Haha, I listened, I clicked the button!

Okay, this is just so adorable!

I do not really play Black Ops or Xbox in total, but I do play video games. It was hilarious how each girl beat each of the boys.

And Paul openly admitting his feelings had me literally gushing.

Great one-shot! Hope you write more, you have talent!

~xXCanaryXx (Aneesa)

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Aw that's cute...haha. Good job! It made me smile :)

Funny story and someone knows their Call of Duty : )