awwww, i really really liked it :3 (yes, i did read it, no, it totally did NOT suck!) One of the things i liked the most about this fic was the subtle way you gave backstory, especially with an OC, without being really obvious or telling *too* much - the way you developed and portrayed the characters was realistic enough to be canon, but still with something new and different to make the story stand out on its own. The plot really was adorable, but in like...a sophisticated way (?), without being overly fluffy or cliche, despite the whole Hitsu/Hina/Aizen thing. i also really liked the idea you developed, of Hitsugaya and Matsumoto's relationship with each other...overall, i was extremely impressed, this is definitely one of the better oneshots i've ever read -

That was. . . indescribable, and that's a good thing. I think it was a mix between, sweet, interesting, nice, and just about any other good word out there, take your pick on which one because there are just too many I could say about this piece.
Not your best one? What does your best writing look like? I can't imagine it getting any better!
Well on a critical point of view, very well written, very descriptive, and a very interesting read because I can easily see it happening, well done.

Madrox out MMFWCL

This was a lovely little piece, even though it felt like a chapter cut from a much larger story. I see from your AN, that this may actually be a preview to a larger story you're working on. If so, your little story here about Toushiro & Rangiku bodes very well, indeed! You've captured their unique relationship beautifully, and your storytelling skills are wonderful! I love the fact that you use such descriptive writing, and pace the story out so that we readers can imagine the scene, and feel the emotions of the characters. Great job, and good luck with your future stories! (I hope you continue to write about Hitsugaya, especially. I crave good FFs for Toushiro!)

wow, considering that this was your first story, you did a great job. but this is a warning about how you said that you'll take flames. i'll tell you right now, i deleated a story because of a flame. those things can be brutal.

hope your incoming storys will be as good (or even better) than this was!

GOOD LUCK TO YOU AND YOUR STORYS!