Loved the plot! This turned out great for what was supposed to be just a one-shot.

Nice story! And I liked the story about Princess Hiyori ;)
There's only one thing I'm curious about: what were they doing all those years in human world? Did they spent the whole time in the warehouse, just training without a job? I think there's a serious gap there in Bleach as a whole (not just your story, this isn't your fault), I mean it's been more than 110 years!

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I don't understand the big deal everyone made about the grammar. It's really not that bad, I've read stories much worse with intentional typing mistakes. The story itself really does a good job of knocking it down anyway. Shinji and Hiyori weren't all that OOC either, at least I don't think they were.

On that note, I loved reading this. I like the way you developed Shinji and Hiyori's relationship without changing how they are in Bleach, with him teasing her and her attacking him. I love his way of proposing to her and arranging the wedding, pretty romantic.

The ending chapters were my favorites. I laughed at the way Shinji and Hiyori reacted to the bets being placed on them, their daughter Kirio taking after Hiyori, Hiyori's reaction to being pregnant a second time. Good work with the great story.

awesome!

Awwww! That's sweet of you shinji

This story is awesome! I like it! Very much

Goodjob!

-symmetricgirl-

Ps.. Just ignore those guys who said you're fic is not good... They just envy you.. Let them be..

Love the story! Hiyori and Shinji are one of my favorite pairings! you're a really goood writer too! I'll have to make sure to read some of your others stories as well!

absolutely adored it

How annoying, if you're just going to review to tell me something I already know, stay the hell of my page. I am WELL aware this story has many errors because it was written via cell phone. Go fall in line with all the other grammar nazi's who go out of their way to insult someones work over it's grammar rather than it's content. GOOD RIDDANCE!

SO...MANY...ERRORS...

I'm sorry. This story has so many obvious and completely irritating mistakes that I just can't read it. Wow. It's like you didn't even edit it at all. .

I'm going to go read another story now.

Please. You need to really fix the grammatical errors.

I thought the story line was amazing~3! I love Hiyori and SHinji together. ~drool~

IT'S OVER? Man, i'm gonna miss this story, oh well, sometimes good things dont last forever, which is why i'm glad soul reapers live so long, it'd be a shame for that face of Shuhei's not to last!

Oh Hiyori, even when she's being sweet it's still oh so sour. really someone needs to get that girl some happy pills, or a pillow pet, they always cheer me up, or brownies, who doesnt love chocolate?