This was great. Though Europeans tend to hold their cigarettes with their thumb and pointed finger. Just a tip.

OMG. . . . That was one of the best stories I've ever read! You go, girl/guy!

This was a hot story. Great job.

Loved it!

It’s awesome very sexy and hot

Very good. I would have hermione be even more smart though, using big words. Then having ginny be impressed by that. Next have ginny be the dominate one again but have her cum first

Wow, really well done! Usually stories like this are so poorly written, unrealistic and downright bad. The writing itself is excellent, clear and very visual. I could so easily picture everything that was happening as I read without the slightest hesitation. Even a little poetic in places. So many writers don't realize that an erotic story is not all about the graphic sex. I was as interested in everything else going on as I was the sexual elements, which is very impressive to me. I admit I found this story because I was horny and the thought of those two together is a huge turn on, but he quality of the writing took me off guard. So thank you for bringing something so much less shallow to my evening! :-)

Judging by your author's note! You can't handle the criticism! XD

That was so sexy. Keep it up!

Smoking is bad for littlekjjknkjnje
Sorry about that my sister is drunk

Loved it man. I'm an aspiring writer myself and this is pretty good :D Keep it up man

Ginny
Helping girls realising they are lesbians since 1999

You are without a doubt the best writer I have seen on when it comes to grammar, but i did find a couple mistakes
-The correct spelling is sync, not synch
-bellybutton is normally written as two words. Thanks! :)

Without a do

I wouldn't smoke in real life, but when two very hot witches do it, it's sexy as fuck.