This is honestly absolutely brilliant you've got the characters bang on
I really love this

Ahhh the ending was priceless good job :)

hehehehehhehehahahahhaaah! a PARROTE? hehehhheheheee loL!

oh that is good! hehehehheeh, please write up a sequel if you haven't already lol! this is great work, eh too short though, i could it see it goin for like 16 chapters or so if you wanted to persue a lesbian romance between the 2.

though that would be hard i suppose, eh always hard writing up long stuff.

the parrot! nice )

Great job with this story.

I was particularly impressed with the way in which you characterized Merrill and Isabella. Both of them felt very genuine, and their interaction had a very natural quality to it. Most of all, I liked the fact that you approached their relationship with subtly. It conveyed hints of a deeper history without overstating anything.

Some of your figurative language was also a pleasure to read. I personally found the line " the ground pulsed like bees beneath Isabela's feet" to be interesting. It's always nice to see an author add some personal flavor to a fic.

Also, your description of Isabela's hangover brought back some memories. Throw in a bad case of heartburn and you pretty much captured my idea of hell :)

Great work and I'd love to see more from you!

Yesss! I was waiting patiently for you to update your other stories and instead you post an entirely new one! Merrill is so damn cute and you wrote her and Isabela brilliantly, you just have to write a sequel or at least another Merrill/Isabela fic, they're too sweet and funny. As always your writing is amazing, pleaseee don't stop.

Very sweet and well written. You wrote Isabela and Merrill very well. Thanks for writing!

I wish I could say more to explain how much I liked it but, the only thing may brain seems to be able to come up with is :"Awwwwwww!

I'm sorry to break this to you, hun: but the cake is a lie. ;P

This was refreshing: I loved the entire feel of it, and the transition from Isabela's hangover adventure to finding Merrill was wonderfully smooth. It was also just nice to see an Isabela and Merrill friendship piece; they complement each other in the best of ways and there's always something special when those two are together. You also did a great job with both of their characterizations: kudos on that.

In lesser words, I enjoyed this immensely. I'd definitely be interested in seeing more from you, if the mood strikes. :)

I am a huge fan of the Isabela/Merrill friendship, I find it entirely touching and never fail to touch upon it myself.

This was very well-written, and the characterizations were lovely. Thank you for writing!

"a crumpled ball of newspaper waiting patiently for the room to empty before quietly stretching back out" really jumped out of the screen and smacked me in the face, so to speak. Wow.

I'm thoroughly impressed with the quality of this story, not only is the writing in itself strong, but your characterization is damn near perfect. I always get the feeling that 'bela is torn between kissing Merrill and mothering her! Maybe that's just me.

I'm grateful that you went into zero detail about Hawke too. It's ridiculous but I enjoy being able to imagine that some of these stories could have taken place in the game, MY game, but I find myself struggling when M!Hawke suddenly sashays in to steal the scene by proclaiming his undying love for Fenris!

This? This could have happened. Thank you for posting! I'd love to see a sequel but I also understand the importance of cake.

Nice one-shot. Personally, I've aways loved the Merrill/Isabela friendship. You've portrayed it well, both in their individual personalities, and the way they fit together as friends. In itself, the writing was just good, too. If there's going to be a sequel, I'll certainly be on the lookout : )

OH OH OH she bought her a parrot so she can be like the Pirates in the stories right? Ya know since she can't magically have a peg leg or anything... D