can you please make more and please if you don't mind lessen the yaoi part...thank you

OMG this was amazing can't wait for next chapter

It was a good story but why was this rate it M? This should be rate it T and even though i know am not going to get answer cuz this was written like 2 years ago lol but still i wanted to ask xD nice story though :)

YEA BUDDY!

Aww cute little ciel reaching for sebastian and either him avoiding or not realizing it.

Where's... O_O Where's the rest of it? (ノಠ益ಠ)ノ彡

good

you must finish this story!

Aww, that was so fluffy. I loved it... It would have been better if the last chapter was longer, but it was still fluffy goodness, :D

Rah! Naughty Sebastian? XD

Aw :( nooo!

Aw poor Ciel is sick :( Sebastian will fix that ;)

(I am going to say this before hand. I apologize if this sounds at all rude.. being tired can make you a bit grumpy. So I apologize for it.)

Well.. the plot has some originality to it.. The fluff is defantly different compared to the other Ciel sick stories. Which is good.

I think you used plan *master* too much with Sebastian. It is okay, to use it once in awhile to take a break from him saying *young master* or *my lord* but to hear it more than *young master*.. is kind of.. weird. It was starting to get a bit annoyed with him. But he wasn't too bad...

Ciel seemed OOC, despite the fact he is sick. He seemd a bit IC, but OOC none the less. But it is understandable that most was this due to him being sick and expressing feelings for Sebastian. So I won't complain anymore with him.

You had a couple of grammar mistakes. Like here: "Your not going to die my Lord, your simply sick." should be: " You are not going to die my lord. You are simply ill (or "just sick")." See how it runs more smoothly. You also had a good deal of words like this " don't" where you wrote it as " dont". These are nothing major, they are simple to spot and easy to fix.

As for spelling, you had some mistakes not much, but few. I can't point them out, but I can say that you spelt openned, wipping, dying, and question. (openned, question and dying in Chapter One. Chapter Two has wipping.)

Details weren't too bad, simply and they described the scene well. I did thought they missed something, but it isn't emotion, I think you could have added more of the five senses though.

Your balance between dialogue and details shifted now and again. In the third chapter for instance, you had more detail than dialogue, and in the second you had a bit more dialogue than detail. Be wary of the balance between those two. Too much of one or too less of one can cause your story to tilt.

You also had a few minor, and I do mean minor, issues with formatting. Like here: "My Lord" Sebastian said, taking Ciel's hand in his own.

"Try and go back to sleep. You need your rest"

Sebastian pulled the blankets back up around his chin then took his hand again.

Be careful not to do that. It kind of confusses people a bit.. but I don't think I need to say that.

Again, I apologize if this sounded at all rude (pulling an all-nighter is tiring.. and not fun), but I hope this helps you in anyway. The story is pretty good, and I enjoyed the little refreshing tid-bits of originality. The detailing was also okay.. and I am curious to see what happens next.

If you need more help you can read the Kuroshitsuji Fanfiction Guide by Zoni. It explains a lot about the characters, how the interact and such. You can read the rest of part 1, 2 and 3 on her DA page ( .com). Again I hope this helps.