._. I think I made mistakes in my previous reviews...sorry...I just realized it...gomen it took so long for me to realize that...:P I usually double check them and I think I did that time...but for some reason I think something's wrong with the computer? Oh n btw it's not mine it's from some place n the internet's slow there. So...I think I'm gonna rewrite it again ._.
I love it,especially the part when Kakashi cried silently into his mask, you do have an unexpectedly great talent for writing, my friend. So...keep up the good work, and do keep in touch though you already freaking left us . Although we do...but what the hell I don't care anymore I don't erase anything when I start writing I'm juz repeating what I wrote that's all :P I'll never forget you and may the Lord bless you...cause you deserve it! Yes...I made some changes along the way...but the message is still the same...kind of ._. ...p/s :if you ever read this review...I think I get the idea what you're thinking after finishing it :P

I hate you for making me cry... Sakura! Im sorry i hates u!

This story is quite poetic and touching. It shows from the outside how torn she was from inside. It's a great story!

I love it,especially the part when Kakashi do have an unexpectedly great talent for writing,my friend._ So...keep up the good work,and do keep in touch even though you'll leave (for me)our group of best friends to further your studies.I'll never forget you and may the Lord bless you...cause you deserve !.

God damn it! This is such a sad story! I love it but hell if I know why I'm crying right now. Great job!

That was beautiful *sniff* *sniff* i was on the verge of tears and i dnt cry easily. but tht was jst wierd when u turned sasuke and naruto gay, i cnt get tht pic out of my head. U scarred me for life

You did really good I really liked it :) Keep up good work and God bless ya

Oh my god. That was so sad at the end.

that'sit? the end?

This was wonderful. I really liked it. Awesome job.

By the way, the "Sasuke is his queen" part made me laugh. xD

This story is a very good one, without a doubt. Your detailing of Sakura's transformation really makes the reader look back at the parts of the canon storyline you mention and you really do mix the parts of the canon storyline in with this storyline, which gives it more credibility, and it really proves that you’ve been paying attention to Sakura’s personal development throughout the series.

It also details how underappreciated Sakura can be, and I think you do a good job of stating that.

My greatest advice to you would to change "At 12" "15th Birthday" to written form so that it looks more professional.

At 12, when she got the feeling...

Seems to look better as:

At twelve, when she got the feeling...

It just makes more sense to use words in a sentence. I remember my English teacher explaining to us that you should always spell out a number that is less than four syllables, simply because it looks much better.

I also would like to say that the numbers don't seem to make sense, and the way it's listed, I would think of it as a list fic. I would suggest removing the numbers, because they don't seem to matter much in the story. I personally think the story would look better without them, and you would most definitely not be breaking any of the rules of the site.

Again, I really like the story, but I think that you should get rid of the numbers so that it isn't in violation of the rules.

Sincerely, C-kun of Critics United

Very epic (it also helped that I listened to lux aeterna by clint mansell). I loved the beginning and how she wasn't remembered because a hero is remembered but a legend never dies. I loved how Ino broke down too.