That was hillarious. Le'me repeat that. Fuckin' Gold my good sir. Fucking. Gold.

LOL. Just wow. This is great :)

LOL, so funny

I LOVE THIS

write a sequel!

xoxo

alixia

It's good, but you should add commas and punctuation and stuff to your sentences. Without clauses, your sentences are long and aren't very easy on the reader.

And a dialogue should have a comma, too. It shouldn't be "Hey Minerva, Arty" Holly said brightly.

It should be, "Hey Minerva, Arty," Holly said brightly.

Anyway, that was a good read!

One of the best AF humour fics I've read, it made me lol several times, which should be enough on its own to show that it worked. Everyone was in character, the situation was deliciously awkward, and I liked the fact that you made Minerva confident about pursuing Artemis, but not a whinging, clingy brat. Also liked the little bit at the end when Minerva and Holly start laughing together, most of the time in fics they're in ludicrous catfight situations. Well done, and keep writing!