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Ah taguya

L'idée est intéressante mais je n'arrive pas à voir Naruto faire cela heureusement c'est assez court et pas ride.

Ah, yes. I remember reading this a few years ago. Still gold I tell you. Minus the few grammar, spelling, and missing punctuation mistakes, still gold!

This one time at band camp I saw the Genral Lee from Dukes of Hazard, it was pretty cool.

Noice

You should make this a little more explicit. Its deliciously sinful, but could use a tad bit more content

Oh the american pie reference

that line at the end! as a band person i can relate lol :p

Nice story, although some spelling mistakes made it sort of bad, other then that this story is pretty good

omg the last scentance ROFL

finish this continue working on it don't keep your reader in serpents

tch lucky bastard naruto

lucky bastard i'd definitely kill to be in naruto's position.

Great job. I really liked this.