Nice story.

Dear gods, please, please, PLEASE update this! I know it's been three years but I'm begging you! From what you've got so far this could be one of the best stories on this site! Please continue!

Almost Perfect,Sharpshooter,Burden to Bear,Strong Back,Xenotech Expert,Lady Killer,Entomologist,Robotics Expert,Adamatium Skeleton,Solar Powered,Child at Heart,Junk Rounds,Brailess,Heartless,Spineless,Mad Bomber,Monocyte Breeder,Sub-Dermal Armour,Confined Bacholor,Terrifying Presence,Jury Rigged,Laser Commander,Lord Death,Plasma Spaz,Night person,Friend of the night,Bloody Mess,Pyromaniac,Meltdown. Traits I would go with Skilled,Wild Wasteland. Sorry about all that those are just recommendations I do not exspect all of them get in

Make it like the wild card and do every perk save energy weapons

It would depend upon his skill set what perks to give LW so I'll just list some general ones: Contract Killer, Solar Powered, Infiltrator and Computer Wiz, Jury Rigging, The Professional, Unstoppable Force, Sub-dermal Armor and Stonewall. CK because he appears as someone who hinted down the corrupt I.e. the Enclave, SP because of the amount of time he had to be in the sun and radiation while healing himself, CW/Infiltrator because he's had too have made mistakes learning how to lockpick/hack terminals, JR because he's had to take care of his weapons for the period of time he was in the wastes, TU because he obviously has become a force of nature, and S-D A / Stonewall because he has learned how to take blows and stay standing with all the different types of enemies there are in the wastes. I enjoy this story and can't wait for more!

Update soon plz

Very interesting. Although a little short and fast. I would have enjoyed the story more if it was a little more descriptive and developed more of a setting instead of just being there . However, I still look forward to the next chapter.

Nicely done. As far as how your story and how The Wildcard are concerned, its no different than when people choose Shepard's background in their stories. There are gonna be overlapping details.

The only thing I would suggest actually has to do with formatting. Instead of using a simple '/' or a 'Shepard POV' to separate sections, either use the horizontal ruler button or come up with a logo. For example, for my stories I use *DN7*DN7*DN7* bolded and italicized to signal scene/POV change while I use the horizontal ruler for major scene changes. Just a thought to help clean up your story!

Keep up the good work!

This is really interesting. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Good start to the story. I only see one problems with this story.

One: You said Sarah was exspecting so wouldnt it be the better option for the Micheal to sacrafice himself because Sarah sacraficed the baby as well as herself.

Continuing on I wouldnt know what it is made of, Adamantium maybe? Not sure.

Except for that if in the next chapter you could say what the pairings are )

WorldStrider

I like this story so far and your writing is good. You should watch your tenses though, you sometimes slip into present tense.

However the entire backstory for your character is almost identical to the one in "The Wildcard" from Matalvis.

It's a given that somethings would be similar, since both stories are based on the same game. The amount of identical details however is staggering.

If you haven't read that story before, then I apologise. Otherwise you shoud mention your source of inspiration.

I hope I can read more soon.

Carrington

Not bad, I'd like to read more.