Congrats i think you just wrote the shittiest plot point in history with the future changing from killing Aizen

That was so stupid. I hate the noble hero cliche who falls on his own sword. To make things worse, you've literally done that now twice in just the chapters. Just...wow. It feels like you don't understand what creativity means.

this is really really great story , loved it . i hope you come back to it soon .

The organasation is from Ajin

All this secret mysterious is fucking annoying. Can't you at least tell the readers what the hell is going on?

Yoruichi in this story is so annoying . Always asking shouting like a banshee. Demanding ordering fucking annoying

Impressive chapter ;) Please continue on updating this fanfic :)

well i have no word for this can you please update this story PLEASE

As the main character was mumbling to himself in a room that was more secure than a fort he coincidentally forgot to check the only blind space in the room allowing the other person who had snuck in to learn all of his secrets, this is so overused and annoying and its happened 2 times in a few chapters

It's not bad, alot better than many of the stories on this site. The only thing that bothered me about it was the random switching to First-Person for a sentence or two.

nice job

What the fuck with fanfic with naruto have tail n fox ear?!

Its very disturbing, kyuubi its NOT DEMON
its massive construct of chakra. Shinobi have chakra and doesnt grow tail

I must say its good until you make some shit about demon crap n fox ear and tail

Its annoying
And darkness, future, fate, destiny crap
You make naruto some sort of psychic, all you have to add its crytal ball

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So I read the first 6 chapters and like the concept behind the plot but the grammar is jist bad. Run it through a word check and or get a beta and this stroy could get good. Will check on it later to see if ya have done anything. Peace

Silentkitsune

HOLY. FUCKING. SHIT! You need to find a good beta reader or something because you seriously need some help with your writing. You've got a good story going, but you have errors in almost every single paragraph so far!