WHAT A TWIST!

Not expected that. Pure genious and seems canon for me. Pinks awesome as always, and Twilight is sneaky pony)) Good story!

o.o

OOOOOH... SNAP!

Awesome)) Lol, Pinkie Pie so random)

Goodness. I'm sorry to have to say it, because this is an interesting story, but you keep adding characters who aren't part of a scene, just as if you had written them entering or the group moving to another place. There are lines missing that would explain that jump.

As it is, this second chapter in particular comes across as "I'm writing so fast I forget to have the camera or the timeline move so the audience can follow the transition between place and time and characters who are there."

That works okay in a dream, but not so well outside of the 'idea happens without explanation and characters who weren't there now are' of a dream. If this story really is just a dream, and you're trying to hide that reveal, I'd suggest keeping a few time-and-place-and-participants markers in the text.

gv... asihda...neemasnaiks... ?

Did Twilight accidentally EVERYPONY but Rainbow Dash?

From the last few sentences, I can now imagine something...

Rarity attempts to tell the secret to Applejack, who is currently using telekinesis. Pinkie pie makes the apples float over her head in an apple bucket, "FOREVER", and then sees Applejack using telekinesis.

Not sure where I was going with that . . .

Nice. But, oh boy. Applejack, too? What the hay is going on? Next thing we know Rainbow Dash will be doing magic.