okay, so what is the name of the next story that continues this? i really liked this!

Okay story

This was an awsome story does it have an sequel? If it doesn't you should right one. I want Usagi to come back. ~_~

I want to start by saying I loved your story, so please don't be offended by any of my constructive criticism! The main premise - that Usagi got to be Sailor Moon in a different way - was very innovative and interesting. I just had a few nit-picky issues.

1. Your writing is good, but it could use work. I rarely say this in stories, because usually authors are too flowery in their descriptions, but sometimes you are a bit lackluster. There are places where characters' emotions are only briefly mentioned when they should be expanded upon. Don't be afraid to go that extra paragraph and really get into a character's head - it can make all the difference in a story!

2. Your physical descriptions are also a bit lackluster, and sometimes awkward. For instance, some of the youma are described very briefly, if at all. I believe for Leo, you just called him a "lion-type youma," which is extremely vague. There actually was a lion-esque youma in the series, in the episode where Makoto's senpai drama is first introduced (the first season), but even that didn't look just like a regular old lion. Please, if you decide to rewrite or change this story, expand on details like that, because I was left hanging as to what the youma looked like and I really wanted to know!

3. The character development feels very imbalanced. For most, if not all of the story, you focus mainly on Usagi, Makoto, Haruka, and Luna, with a little bit of Michiru and Mamoru. It's great if you like these characters more than the others, and maybe this is just a Venus fan talking, but I would have liked to see a little more character development overall, even if it was only a trace. You never discuss the girls' feelings about being a senshi (with the exception of Usagi) - again, I would've liked to know them!

These are just suggestions. Honestly, apart from those minor things I mentioned above, I really liked your story; it was overall pretty difficult for me to find much wrong with it! Good job - I'm moving on to the sequel now. I think you've inspired me to write a Sailor Moon fanfic...

Very awesome Rube-kun. It reminds of the old days when all we did was rp and write fanfic*remineces* ah to be that way again...*hugs*

omg i hope u make a sequal... this cant be the end :( this story is very very good and i love it... Update soon

update soon:)

Nice! I'll read the rest later!

love ur story write more asap iight ~mia~

dude we were loving this why did you stop?we were waiting a year !

What in hell is going on. You havent updated in a whole year, a whole f'n year - 10 days

I'm really liking this story, please update it.

hey i hope ur muse stays too plz post more soon

I really do hope your muse if you'll excuse the expression slaps you upside the head with her powers. I love this story.

Thank you very much.

Finally a fic that doesn't have Usagi as a clumsy and coward leader.

I loved the scene where she slapped Haruka.

I just can't get with Haruka and Kunzite being gay.

Not to offend anybody.

Great fic

please update soon

You think you can leave it there? That's unfair! I want the next chapter now! lol

Come on, its awesome, I know you can write more.