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Oh i forgot in my anger..
Don't get it in most fanfics cause it could never succeed, the trust and bond the have and people who know them. The grown ups now they love each other, damn harry even told hermione he wants nothing with ginny, there friendship and trust is so weak don't even talk or whatever isn't right. It's happend instantly and not growingly either people forget about such a clear sign or make them dumb witch is even bad.

Disgusting! you call this pure harmony and romance while there isn't any! the ending is just sick, (only good thing would be removing the child etc..) can't be happening and disrupt there lifes very much.
-Oh harry saved and suddenly it jumpes a lot of time and there together, while the whole frickking time we read this hoping on the first kiss or i love you why deny us that!
-Odd that molly is left out here cause it clearly indicates she has something to do with this. Why isn't she even doing anything when hermione came over?
-Ginny sentenced is way to light.
Might read the sequel if it comes but i can tell i will hate it even more, aparently there will be nog peacefull life for h/hr.

Ginny she have kissed by a dementor

The title of the story do not seems right on the basis of plot.

Why the cliffhanger?!

Hola! Linda historia, aunque me molesta como nadie pudo darse cuenta que había algo sucio entre Ginny y Harry, es decir todos sabían que amaba a Hermione y vamos, nadie sospecho del cambio de corazón!? Imaginare que tu historia termino antes de recibir esa carta, porque aunque da a entender que habrá una secuela, han pasado muchos años para pensar que vayas a continurla. En fin, buena historia, gracias por compartirla.

I'm not going to read the sequel if you plan to write it because I'm never reading anything from you ever again. I have lost all respect for you as a human being because of this one chapter. The only way I will even CONSIDER reading a sequel is if the sequel is a one-shot and Harry and Hermione have no NEED to worry about Ginny's baby because by the will of MAGIC ITSELF, Ginny has a miscarriage that causes the baby to be born prematurely and die. Harry then pulls out a gun and blows that red-headed bitch's head off, then he and Hermione return home and proceed to fuck each other's brains out over the next week to completely ERASE Ginny from all of their memories so that the next time someone asks about Ginny, their only response is "Who?".

good twist

Okay, you've been writing "defiantly" three times now. In two instances it COULD be correct, even if it would mean a long stretch. But the third doesn't make any sense, so I have to assume that you mean "definitely", which would fit and which is quite often falsely used by native speakers. It took me quite some time to understand that it's a (sadly rather common) error and not some idiom with a hidden meaning a non-native speaker never understands. And now every time I see it used falsely I get toothache.

The story is interesting but "defiantly" definitely turns me off.

Sequel! The twist at the end was nice

I. Would. Love. A. Sequel. Please.

Your plot is good, but the word mis-use and spelling (breath when you meant breathe, defiantly when the sentence needed definitely) is a bit distracting. Hope your betas help with editing as it goes on!