Oh no! Just as they returned to Hogwarts. I hope you feel up to continuing this at some point.

waste of my time go to hell and I hope you kill yourself, other than that disappointing , put a warning that this is dead so that people do not waste time they can use reading other literary works

I can only hope you come back to this some day. Great story.

Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you find the inspiration to pick this up again and I will be happily waiting and hoping for just that. Kudos!

Again with how accepting Harry is, I understand your saying that the bond is mixing there emotions and his gaining Hermione’s feelings towards the girls but the ease in which his going about it is just annoying really. He has had not one complaint about it all, having strangers forced onto him. The fact that one of the first people to say I love you to him has within a day had adulterous feelings and wants to date Susan and daphne, all without talking to Harry about it once, until a pretty much rushed conversation in a public area. Where also he found out pre much before one word was said that he has no say about it one bit. You point out again in the chapter how upset and angry Harry is about Dumbledore controlling him and he wants no more of it from anyone. What Hermione has done is pre much the same, unintentional or not he should be at least having minor problems with it and questioning it more. Dong things like that adds more hurdles to overcome and provides more depth and connections between characters.

with this chapter, Harry is suppose to be the main character but he just feels like a tag along, having pretty much no say in what has happened so far. It’s like his just a doll that just goes along with everything and has barely questioned it. And with Hermione‘s mum she said this chapter that all four of them care for each other, Harry has yet to have a one on one conversation with Daphne or Susan. I can guess why you have made it that way but you just lose so much depth. All my reviews are not meant to be flames, just pointing out things you could do to improve. If you take them on board or not is up to you.

Ok another thing to point out, this chapter just made it seem that Harry was intruding on the girls relationship. And from what I’ve seen you have made it seem that Hermione has dam well stronger feelings for the girls, then Harry and the only difference nearly is that for the last 2-3 chapters they have had sex. And the girls haven’t. And your making it seem like Hermione is the main character not Harry, that’s been going on since you introduced Hermione in the story like the first chapter. If this is the case out a warning up so people know before they start reading.

I’m liking the story but I have to point this out, Harrys cool acceptance of his new girlfriend/wife/soul bonded, feelings towards two girls he barely knows and how it’s obvious what she feels for them, even without the soul bond. Someone like Harry should be a hell of a lot more wary, considering you have already pointed out that he only just started to understand what love is, it blows the immersion because it’s obvious you have only gone that way to get the other two in, and it’s just not realistic. people don’t act like that. I get not wanting to add the whole jealousy drama in to things but people get jealous, it’s a part of being human. Having them over come that in the relationship will just add a lot more depth into the story your creating. And it doesn’t have to be a massive amount of jealousy just a little bit, having him question it, observing more, etc doing things like his helps get the reader more connected to the characters and what your trying to portray. This is a problem I find with most story’s that involves a harem. That and a lot of writer’s tend to make it seem the women in the harem are closer and more in love with each other then they are with the husband. I think this is what makes harem story’s hard to make good because it’s a pretty fine line. Only seen probably a dozen or so decent ones on this site, and most of them only involve at max 4 people. More people you add to the harem harder it gets to write a compelling story.

I would like to ask a question about time and stay clear of religion. religion is no answer at all.

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It’s a shame that this story remains unfinished. It’s well written and entertaining I hope that at some point you will be able to return to it. In the mean time, thank you ever so much for allowing us to share your story with you.

Wow, Harry is one merciful faggot. Hey, gotta give enemies like fagboy Malfoy chances, right? Fuck you.

It'd be nice if you would mark the beginnings & endings of all your "lemon" sequences, for those of us who would prefer to pass them over. Thanks much! Good story!

Another couple of items:
You keep making incorrect usages, ie:
sometimes whee it should have been some times, &
away where it should have been a way.
You very often insert question marks (or queries) (?) where there is no actual question (or query).

Another point: You keep using "taking" when you mean "taken".