Reviews for Another Witch? |
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A2463 chapter 10 . 7/7/2012 Absolutely love it! Really love it! |
xXseleniumXx chapter 7 . 7/3/2011 There was one spot where you said the word "eyes" way too many times too close to each other. And sometimes the characters tend to state the obvious. But that's my only criticism. You're doing a good job at slowing things down to the appropriate speed, so that it's not like "and then we did this. And then we did this..." Keep going. |
xXseleniumXx chapter 6 . 7/3/2011 omg that last paragraph reminded me of that movie: "Shut up! Silence! Shut the fuck up!" lol and it would appear Google Translate has failed you this time...haha! But other than that I love it! A few kind of awkward phrases, but if you'd written another draft of this it would've been perfect. Keep it up. |
xXseleniumXx chapter 5 . 6/24/2011 best chapter yet! |
xXseleniumXx chapter 4 . 6/8/2011 pretty clean. Does it get dirtier? lol |
xXseleniumXx chapter 3 . 6/8/2011 I like it. cute. I think things happened too fast, though. You need to slow it down, be more descriptive. Otherwise the reader loses their sense of immersion. |
xXseleniumXx chapter 2 . 6/8/2011 That depressed me. But that's what you meant, right? Idk if the girl would've really survived if she was beaten for HOURS, but it was definitely powerful. |
xXseleniumXx chapter 1 . 6/8/2011 I really liked the French you used in this. It made it come alive. Also, I think it really captures how superstitious and irrational the church was back then. |