Fantastic. No other words, just fantastic. It's a much darker, complex and nuanced take on MLP. All of the characters are well written, well realised and deep. It's a stark contrast to the Black and White, Happy, Clappy canonical MLP series. All of the characters are deeply emotionally flawed and struggle with their inner turmoil. The story plays out in a complex, but trilling way and involves a lot more political intrigue and bloodshed, while simultaneously juggling heavily philosophical themes and ideas.

Writing so good it keeps me interested even tho not my usual genre.

Well shit, that’s pretty good

Wow, what a Gary Stu Braveheart is.

This is the shittiest story I've ever read. (Except the trite that RealityCheck shits out, seriously, fuck him) You made Celestia a complete bitch (even though you said you didn't hate her) and you somehow included sexism towards mares in a story taking place in a female dominated society.

Best story I have read in a very long time. Good pace, suspense, action, description, and most of all, a VERY good ending. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story.

Well, here goes nothing, I'm going to stick my arm down the ass schinter of this story and hopefully dredge something out of it that redeems it.

This is gonna be unpleasant, I fucking know it.

Celestia and Luna, in the flashback, sound like the Vorlons and the Shadows in Babylon 5.

Like the subtle reference to Odysseus (who took the false name "Nobody") and Polyphem the cyclops, who said there was a human to his brothers, and when asked his name, replied "there was Nobody".

It is a very interesting story. Thank you for shareing it with us.

That was the most brilliant story I read in months.

Big Mac: "guards are closing in, they all saw that rainboom. Should be here any second. Now where were we. Ah yes! Let me give you a long and elaborate speech about our parents before we head out" :-) great story though.

Within the first chapter, I find a Lord of the Rings reference and Greek used an an old language.

Fascinating.

I have never felt entirely comfortable with Celestia being portrayed as 'evil', but your story is quite captivating.

You could've gotten away with having Spike trampled to death rather than some random colt. It would've affected Rarity (his crush) and Celestia (his mother figure) more deeply. He was pretty pointless throughout the story, and I doubt many readers would've cared; few people seem to give a rat's ass about him.

After a bit of skimming threw a few chapters. I can say its been 1000x times better than what they were before. I know we've haven't seen eye to eye, ever. But I still enjoyed this, diamond in the rough, while it still has flaws (mainly stuff about the Everfree forest itself) and glad it didn't devoted into a long rant about how much Luna hates Celestia what the story somethings seem as. Celestia has grown to being one of my favorite characters and I'm really sick of seem being viewed as an tyrant or a rapist.

As for the everfree, well I've always found it out the way you handle it. To me, it being the only normal forest (to human standards) it just to show how different their world it. Its the odd one out, (as I mention) kinda like how in I Am Legend, how the last human in a world of vampires is now the real monster. I am in The Elder Scrolls you can be the drinking buddy with a god, and dragons word debates are epic battles. And if it isn't and ponies 'tamed' the weather than its just OUR next step in our journey. After all, irrigation, dams, the weather report, all those are us trying to do what Rainbow Dash does in her 9 to 5.

Anyway if you ever do another story I would suggest have a character talk about the deeds of a character rather than make then an expy of them. Like say, Big Mac talks about how Celestia gave the Apples the land that is now Ponyville and always makes sure their farms have enough walk. Like the ideal is to show Luna (and the reader) that every bad thing Celestia does she does ten good things. While Luna may not approve she can at least understand.

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