| Reviews for Path of Betrayal:Adopted by Shikomiko |
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   grimmich chapter 20 . 4/6/2019 id say what im assuming is #1. at least that is closest to what i want to say I guess. they story isnt bad but it needs a smoother time line, your characters need a little work, you need a beta reader, and the biggest one is I would suggest planning out more of the story and then write it because you are kind of a little choppy. other then that the story isn that bad. |
| lara5170 chapter 8 . 5/13/2017 I thought Kagome said she didn't know much about gengutsu just how to get out of it and stop it. |
| lara5170 chapter 5 . 5/13/2017 I'm confused about how Kagome went from untrusting and cold for 10 years to soft and emotional in a matter of days...? |
| lara5170 chapter 3 . 5/13/2017 How did she go from being able to hold her emotions to suddenly crying over something that happened over 10 years before as if it just happened? It just seems odd that she is suddenly singing, crying and being mushy |
| lara5170 chapter 1 . 5/13/2017 I just reread the first chapters of this story and Sakura was kicked out of the team but she's suddenly with them now, did I miss something? |
| Late Night Dreamer chapter 20 . 4/14/2017 This is a good story but it get confusing and I feel that it needs to be rewritten it will probably help people understand it better and help you get your guys ideas you seem to jump from one thing to another. I suggest just stay with one idea and slowly transition into your other ideas. But I do like the plot and the pairing and I hope you do decide to fix and continue it. |
| Shikomiko chapter 20 . 4/11/2017 Thank you for letting me know about the problem. Ill be posting the update with the new edited version of the story soon. -Kick Butt and Eat Chocolate Shikomiko |
| Mistress Katana chapter 21 . 4/11/2017 You have links mixed in with the texts. |
| inuyasha16451 chapter 20 . 4/3/2017 Love the story so far and I can't wait to read more chapters soon. |
| gust chapter 1 . 3/27/2017 I'm sorry i can't read this she messed the whole Story up :( |
| Bloody Amethyst chapter 1 . 12/3/2016 Question... Why is Sakura there all of a sudden? She isn't part of the team (at least not in the original story when you adopted it...) |
| Saiyan Warrior chapter 20 . 11/15/2016 1) this story had more comments then an actual story line. It jumps all over the place. The characters seem to do a 360 in regards to personality. It seems moee like short plots composed into one story then an actual story with flow. A lot of important info is lost as the story jumps. It made absolutely no scenes. The only part I actually like is the Sakura bashing and the SasKagNar paring. |
| lara5170 chapter 2 . 11/11/2016 Why did this story start at chapter 8? |
| shikilove chapter 20 . 9/5/2016 3 I like and enjoy the story |
| hallelujah I'm a bum chapter 1 . 4/2/2016 sorry I'm confused wasn't sakura kicked out in the original chapters? |
