Well, well, nice one, I would say that it might have been a little bit too fast, but that is to be expected, it's a one-shot, after all. I think you should definitely write more like this, maybe even a longer story in the future, taking a little bit more time for development and exploration of the feelings of each character.

that was perfect

That was really good. This is definitely my OTP besides HomuMado. I look forward to more awesome stories from you!

Damn, you nailed Kyouko's personality _ ! Sayaka was great too, and I loved the way you wrote the kiss. I would have liked a more romantic ending better, but that might have been too OOC. Please write more of these two, they're my drug and I'd love to see more from you.

You had a good plot going there, but it was too rushed towards the end. You could have easily stretched this out over multiple chapters and the flow would have been better, I think.

Still, please do keep writing.

awww this was prety cute lol i really enjoyed reading it

This is awesome! People say that Kyoko and Sayaka can't work together while being completely in-character, but I think you nailed it pretty well with this story!

Kyouko is always so straight forward XD

Nice one shot and it would be nice to see more of those 2

Don't you know? Aaaaaaaaaaangst makes everything better!

But, seriously, it's a pretty good story. Now, if only this happened in canon.

Nice. Angst, yes, but that's not a bad thing. Well, not for the reader, in any case.

You got Kyouko down perfectly, and Sayaka was well-written also. No major flaws, nothing that was distracting from the story.

And yes, please do write more KyouSaya. There is always room for more of these two.

it was ok angst lol MORE OTP PLEASE! LOL

Nice :) Yeah it did come out abit angsty, but then again it could just be me.

Yeah more KyoukoxSayaka would be nice