Well, that was one way to do it :D (screaming it from the rooftop lol. At least now it's done she can't really take it back)

What... What height did he just ask her to jump off from...

"He didn't know how to deal with crying girl" (missing word)
"as she was about to reach for HIS tie" rather

Nooo not Tsukishima, whyyy... Aww come on, this chapter was so positive, why'd it have to end that way?

"would DO little to help" (typo)

Hopefully someone will accidentaly burn those magazines or something...

So, about the date... ... Yeah Ichigo is totally going to misunderstand... (I hate misunderstandings, but they are so common in books, I guess lots of people like them, so it must just be me)
Lol, Karin not correcting it because it's too much effort though XD

The Gotei is in trouble with Mari lol
Who would want to go back anyway? Freedom is a drug

Aww, she's worried they'd take him away...

Soichiro? Huh? I wonder what happened?

Song song is really great :O

Lucille? I thought you wanted them together anyway? Why are you smiling bitterly? *is intreagued*

As for I, I was born in Paris on a Winter morning, and the first thing my parents thought when they saw me was "damn, she has a dragon's nose" (true story) X'D

They. Told. All. Of. It. Thank goodness

"especially after not using it months" is missing a word

Marise, dear, don't force him to don the mask in front of you... It's awesome for us readers, but might not be good for you...

"blond squad" XD

Both sides are making the relationship complicated, aren't they? Also, Shinji, there's something called 'the internet', and it's history can be erased, just so you know

"she never really wEnt on the Internet" (typo)
-so why did he stop?"- shouldn't have a " at the end

Shinji's actually going by the rule! *hopes that Mari will just drop the rules at some point*

Ah, she kinda did! This is adorable!

Hahahah Mari balancing the gift and contemplating the art X'D

Note: Kuugo is the only character for which you've been putting the last name last instead of first like in Japanese

Oh, the log is so essential. I don't know how often people in Japan have these, and i don't know about the US either, but in France you can't have Christmas without the log (they make logs out of ice cream as well nowadays!)

Hiyori slapping him with the cookie... XD

I wanna eat bredele... T_T My sister said she'd get some over to me, but somehow it didn't happen...

SHE CONFESSED! Finally! OMG Poor Shinji had to wait so long...

That IS the right way to celebrate it!
In the high school I was in last year there was this one day every year when students from 12th grade would throw raw eggs and flour at people in the streets around the school. They'd get scolded for it, of course - in fact, it was banned, but they did it anyway (I remember having to dodge an egg when arriving at school one morning lol)
I bet Mari would've enjoyed participating in that

Huh. How come I didn't know that song yet? I mean, in general, I rather like that band...

It's a really nice interpretation to consider that the Visored feel kinda lost after Aizen was locked up - they had sorta been living for their vengeance after all, but people seem to forget how much it seemed to matter to them

Lucille and those decorations... Isn't that a bit too much? X'D

"of what Kisuke had SAID to him", rather? (typo)

You would've thought Mashiro and her would get along, since Mashiro's seen the show at least... But then again... XD

You'd need a transition in between the house scene and the convention, it lost me a bit

Aww, Mashiro being sweet even if she doesn't like her very much :)

Hmm... Did you take into account that the school year rather matches the actual year in Japan? And doesn't begin in September at all?

*is too tired to go on reviewing*
...It's 3am again... This story's way too addictive... *falls asleeps*

That... Thank goodness she's not THAT much of an idiot, but it still kinda hurts... Ughhh why are you doing this to him, give in already (you're good at getting the reader frustrated, but not actually at you, so that's actually pretty good)

Well, that outcome was to be expected - the problem wasn't even with the muffins, really just with the participants. I blame Ichigo for the whole thing (lol)

...Also, sorry about the short reviews, sometimes I'm way too into the reading to bother n_n;

Song sounds very much like her

Ohhh THAT's what she had gotten as a gift! O_O; Whoa okay

OMG! It's actually a sword? X'D (Love it. BTW, is the ribbon around her finger now part of it?)

WTF. What is happening O_O; Realy curious to know what her powers are

"she stammered, hoping he would lunge at her etc." Uhh, hoping that he WOULDN'T do it, rather?

Hmm... So Orihime is maybe not a Fullbringer... I wonder what she'd be, then? (Also, apparently you didn't follow Aizen's interpretation that she can 'erase events'... Then again, the guy DID lie a lot, so whatever)

You forgot a " at the end of the part with Orihime

Wait. WAIT A MINUTE. How does Soichiro know Isshin was a Captain? A Fullbringer (as I thought he was) has not much of a reason to know that...

Why ARE you asking so many questions indeed? XD

Oh, well that went better than expected. He even gets to keep 'em! Hurray! XD

Milkshake... :F

Ah, so my sister's not the only who thinks Xcution look like gang members? XD

Poor Mari... n_n;

Nice song

Yuzu is so sweet. This is all so sad...

"And YOUR boyfriend too" (mistake)

Hachi, the quote master! X'D Love him

How dare you call croissant 'bread' for the second time! Oi, it isn't made the freaking same way! There's butter in croissants, for instance! *feels slightly insulted even though she can't cook*

'What a strange kid' That's because he's actually older than you, Lucille...

"a conversation between her AND Keigo" (typo)

Shinji, you... Oh whatever, we readers like it. You can keep that just fine. Curious to know if she'll notice it's missing
...Well, she noticed. Hopefully Shinji's gonna be okay after she's done pounding him into the ground with (justified) accusations... Or better even, hopefully she'll be too distracted by something else and forget about it

Wonder why Xcution want her to join so badly... Please be okay, Mari T_T

One more great song I now know n_n

Tartines. Gosh, I wish I had the patience to eat that instead of cereal in the morning... And then sometimes I just don't have the time... And then sometimes the bread is too old and as hard as stone (I like it that way though, it's jsut hard to cut), and sometimes there isn't any more bread because my parents ate the whole loaf and my mom forgot to get a new one (yeah yeah I'm complaining on purpose at this point. I still do love the two of them)

I don't picture the Visored as having that much money either, so yeah, bowl of rice it is... Is bread even common enough in Japan?

Rainbows ARE cool. I used to be obsessed with them
In fact, since my first name, my middle name AND my last name have seven letters each, I used to write my full name in rainbow colors, one for each letter...

Orihime. Sometimes you can be so... Oblivious... Argh. Dammit, someone get some of those tissues for me (no no, it's not that. As a reader I know it didn't happen. I'm just obscessed with tissues - I used to collect used ones, but thankfully I stopped that hobby years ago

Owling. What. Also, Ochi having to return to therapy because of her X'D
I must look silly all the time, now that you meantion it. It's nt something I really pay attention to most of the time, but I 'flutter' from place to place when at home, skip along the road, rub my cheek against my mom like a cat, and 'walk like a nun' (my mom calls it that because I have my fingers interlaced over my stomach...)
...Storking looks fun, I should try it sometime

And ice cream sandwich... I haven't had those in like, forever... They don't exist in France... T_T (And I mean, they don't exist AT ALL here)

"Are you sure you want me TO" (typo/mistake)

That girl in your class kinda sounds like me lol

Aww, love Mari's mother - actually really reminds me of my own when she's not acting crazy (my mom isn't no-nonsense, yet she's the opposite of crazy most of the time, so up until now I would have had trouble seeing any ressemblance)

"it really made it the right side up" Love it

Nope. Nope. Lucille did NOT just do that. WHY.
Ugh, she did it... I thought you wanted grandchildren?
Oh well, could've gone worse

Dunce cone? *looks it up* ...WTF

Shaving Shinji's hair off while he's spleeping... Hm, sounds familiar...

You. Got. The freaking accents. Right. éèàêâîôëö The friggin' things
Even French people get them wrong. Did you study French? Are you French? Or were you just wayyy more careful than most people are when putting in that sort of thing?

Aww, Shinji's being so sweet...

Still don't understand why French braids are called that way. Also, French fries ARE NOT FRENCH, just saying, so many people get it wrong (they're from, uhh... Belgium or Sweden? Not sure)

Love the way Lucille and Shinji act like accomplices sometimes

Lucille mentioning his parents... We don't even know, even as readers, whether he died or was born directly in Soul Society...

Truth... Whoa... Now that's actually deep FOR REAL

You know I'm supposed to be in bed already, right...?
*has to force herself to go to bed*
*looks at time* Dammit it's 2:15am...

Here goes another song I didn't know but really like

What?... Only 29 chapter left? Dang, I don't want this to be over...

You keep teaching me so many words XD

Oh, THAT trench coat! Yeah, you can borrow it, he only wore it for one or two chapters and never put it on at any other point in the manga

Freakin' hell! He kept his Captain's Haori and hung it with his clothes? Well, it's a really good opportunity for her to wonder about him

Yeah, no, living with friends in a warehouse is definitely NOT the kind of thing she would expect. Love that you actually pay attention to this stuff, it's actually my sweet spot over everything else

You know, I shouldn't read this at night. Or I should be in the desert, that way I can scream all I want and not bother anybody. Here are some things that made me want to explode into a supernova but couldn't:
Hiyori showing up with threats even though she hits Shinji all the time
Poor Mari getting threatened with a blade, which she probably didn't expect, and freezing up in fear
The man with the fruit cart
Mari running away again
"I hate humans" Soooo many people ignore the fact that she said that! Love uuuuu
Okay I'm stopping the list here because it's impossible to copy and paste on FFN

"not before she took OFF Shinji's coat" (missing letter)

It's absolutely horrid to see one's parents cry. They're the people that, in your mind, never cry, yunno? It feels so freakin' wrong

...She's not actually going to do it, is she? She's gonna go back to Shinji, isn't she? I hope hope hope hope hope

"having no idea what to make of a simple Human looking at what he used to be"
"having no idea what to make of a simple Human looking at what he used to be"
"having no idea what to make of a simple Human looking at what he used to be"
"having no idea what to make of a simple Human looking at what he used to be"
*reads it over and over* This is so perfect a clause

Oh gosh, lol, I admit I saw that coming about 2 lines before the word 'stage' appeared. Rose is reading at her café, isn't he?

'Why' indeed?
That IS sooo deep though. Totally impressive. Thankfully, it actually doesn't waste much of one's time to listen to X'D

Lol, these fangirls... X'D

"She made him feel alive, something he hadn't felt in about a hundred and ten years" Well, Aizen did say they had 'nothing to fear', since they 'already died a hundred years ago'... (Note: Isn't it 100 years instead of 110 years? 110 years is when the flashback arc started, but it ended 101 years before, I think)

Thank goodness she's not planning on going! But yeah, hopefully at least someone will be there to defend her, because he's coming for her... (For once, her denial will have protected her)

Aww, Shinji watching Lupin is so adorable... What is that show anyway? *adds it to the 'to watch' list*

Misato! You meantioned Misato! (She's actually one of my favorite characters - why do so many people ignore her in their writing, dammit!)
Note: Love how you write her too, that's actually darn right ICness you've got there

Come on Misato. You're sooo practical to drive the plot. Just put them next to each other... Yeah, just like that... X'D

What. Are. These two. Fullbringers. Doing. Here.

Looking forward to seeing Riruka and Marise in school :D

Shinji's Reiatsu weighing down XD

"I wish that I wish that I could" sounds like a weird sentence

*is too swept away by the scene to comment at first*
Holy shit
O_O;

White feathers? Wonder where that comes from

Blanche number 2, eh? Dreamy much? Still finding it adorable though... Wonder what Ginjou is trying to do exactly, and what's going on...

*is swept away into reading again*

I really like the idea of Orihime being a guardian angel

Is... Isn't Shinji kinda risking letting his Hollow out of control, when being in such a state? *is worried*

I had a fight with my mom earlier, and cried a lot, and I thought I couldn't feel the trails on my cheeks where the salt had dried them up. But since I'm on the verge of tears again I feel them now...
Definitely my favorite chapter until now

I was actually kinda missing the angst. I really like a good humour/angst mix, it's so perfect

Honestly, for someone who doesn't plan ahead much, you DON'T suck plot-wise. And you're really good at writing angst, actually. Not that knowing your limitations is a bad thing, of course, and you probably know them better than I do

And here's another awesome song I now know thanks to you
Thx
Lol the poor guy is being treated like Shinji in the video

Description of the car... Why do I feel something is going to happen to it? (To me, Shinji wouldn't care for a car much, but I don't give a damn about cars, so that may be why)

"Are you here to fix the faucet". OMG. I love that woman when she does that

Shinji is kinda skinny. AND pale. Could've spared us the last comment though... Come on, what kind of mom are you? XD

"He looked over to her closeT" (missing letter)
Line starting with "Isn't it?" has an extra letter: "again and again to A make it for me"

Lucy considering them selfish for groping his ass without her... They really are a bunch from the same family, aren't they? X'D

All hail Soichiro, the sane adult of the house! Poor dude

Totally a French thing. Not that my family do it, but French people in general tend to act more freely, especially people like me... (Just got a complaint from my classmates that I was overly annoying and distracted them in class because I participated too much... Gotta make efforts relating to that...) But yeah, French people also complain a lot more in general - it's not just a cliché, but although it doesn't apply to everyone, it's still kinda true...

My kink is tall and skinny... What do you mean, 'that sounds familiar'?

Really like the way you write (like, for example, the part where Marise is wondering how upset Shinji is with her. It intergrates itself perfectly into the narration, and doesn't even sound odd at all, it sounds so cool actually...)
...Now that I think about it, I might have a serious kink for writing instead of a type of men... Kill me already (please don't, I don't wanna die lol)

I really, really have an enormous amount of respect for you. There it is: the very proof that an OC can be amazing without necessarily being a 'relatively perfect' person. It's amazing that you managed to write her this well, and that you managed to make her so lovable even though, in real life, I'm pretty sure I'd hate her - but as a character, I believe she is entering my all-time favorites, and this is including actual published books (not that they are better than fics - some fics are so much better writing-wise/plot-wise/character-wise than most books)

Love Ryu, too. He sees the world so matter-of-factly, it's amazing for a kid (see, people? A character DOES NOT need superpowers to be amazing, dammit!)

Hahahah there are some parts here we're getting Shinji's accent full-force, love it XD

Oh dear. Is it the glasses. I do NOT want to picture Shinji having to wear glasses 24/7...

I loved the whole thing (about the chapter, I mean). Poor Shinji n_n;