Great story! Please continue it! :)

Shame this wasn't continued...well written.

Oh so sweet. Hook it to my veins!

Ah Elesee is the master strategist. Kick ass, girl, kick ass! I wonder if Aveline and Donnic will return... the story just wouldn't be complete without them... :(

that was crazy...is it bad that part of me wants her with zev too?lol

Well, Hawke was never one for long good bye's but damn... still sad. So much craziness and guilt. What is Fenris going to do? What is Elesee really looking for? Don't make me wait too long! It'll drive me crazy with imaginings. XD

Oh! What's she going to do?

So happy I found your fic! I finally finished my first playthrough today (2 kids will do that to you)and after being robbed of a decent ending, I was craving for a continuance in the storyline. My Hawke was also a Rogue with white-blond hair and indigo eyes, so I am really picking up what you are putting down! Couldn't be more perfect. Loved every second so far and can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Beautiful use of dreams and flashbacks in these last two chapters... I'm really liking your style so far!

Thanks for the reply regarding my review, and for being so nice about it.

It's such a wrench to write something you don't like, but I suppose when you think about it, the characters and plot pretty much drag you along for the ride whether you like it or not. Take Flemeth. The one thing I'm definitely /not/ doubting is Flemeth's motive: I wouldn't put it past her in the slightest, and your explanation of her motives makes sense in context. But I can see you understand why the plot point would make me baulk, and that's reassuring. Some writers just hurl something like that in to shock, with no plan beyond that. I'm still not too keen, but that you actually have a plan beyond that makes me feel better about it.

I am sorry that I ended up squeezing spoilers out of you though. I definitely wasn't angling for that, but it's evidence that you care about your readers, and it does help. I do try to be as fair as possible in my reviews, because god knows I'd hate it if someone just hurled abuse. It was still a bit of a knee-jerk reaction though, and I appreciate you responding to me.

I wonder if there's a way to edit these, or warn folks? I'd hate to be the one who spoiled half the story.

Oh well... I suppose what's done is done. Whatever happens, I'll be waiting patiently for the following chapters. I'm more interested than ever now to see how you'll resolve this. At least now when I review (and I will ) I'll know to keep stum until you've sorted everything out.

I appreciate your review. I took no pleasure in the chapter and cried as I wrote it despite knowing the true intention behind it. The child is not dead. As I had mentioned, i'd make it up to aveline and I intend to. He-which is actually a she-will come back later in the story. Flemeth's background is shrouded in mystery as to how she obtains her daughters (e.g. morrigan). This is a take on just how she does such a thing. Normally I would not give away the background of my stories or plot points but I don't like anyone to distress over such an issue. I am glad that it was powerful enough to effect you however and I really appreciate your taking the time to not judge the rest of the story based of this chapter. I hope this helps.

So wait... out of the many, many prices that her companions could have paid, you decide that an unborn baby has to die?

Was this really necessary? It's heartbreaking and difficult enough for a real life mother when she feels she must decide the fate of her child. To then use it as a plot point - not to mention taking it out of her hands by having the others all rail against her - is quite disturbing. Using a convoluted lesson from her dead father to justify it isn't exactly helping. I know Dragon Age is supposed to be morally grey and all, but still... It's unpleasant and quite cheap in terms of shock value.

I'll make it clear though: I'm only judging this chapter as opposed to the whole fic. It's because I like this fic that I'm annoyed. Overall, I like your writing style and command of language, and have enjoyed reading. The grammar is good and the dialogue is nicely paced (I'm liking the pauses and interruptions and such, they're good and lively). The problem is that fate of the world or not, it just seems uncalled for.

I'll be quiet now. Good luck with it, and regardless of my criticism I'm looking forward to seeing what you do next.

Have a nice day. I'll give the Writers Block Imps a kick for you on the way out :)

Wow, I feel so bad for Aveline. Though I have to ask, when did Fenris get lyrium markings around his eyes?

Oh, my, /sniffle.

You had me in tears when I read that. It was so good and had the ability to make a person feel just as vulnerable and helpless as Aveline. Gah! /sniffle

Hmmmm... what is "the old hag that talks too much" up to?

And I would feel so horrible in Fenris's place for doing lyrium infused field surgery on my beloved. :(

This is good, so good- I'm loving your verbal candies... can I have some more?