The best part of this story is how proud the author is she fucking kick ass.

hola espero que pronto pueda subir el resto de los capítulos de la historia

Sus historias son las mejores! Me imagino que el final será la boda de nanoha y fate XD
Aquí estaremos esperando por cualquier actualización :)

Good start hope for more!

I love this story i have read it multiple times pleeeeeease update it

Well.. I had read stories where Fate is made as Futa.. Nanoha as a Futa and even Fate as transgender..
Actually as Fate's fan.. I feel sad knowing Fate is put in such position.. Now hermaphrodite?
Hm still as long as nanoha ends with Fate and they're happy I give my blessing XD.
Right this is fic so we are free to write anything we want..
I found a story here where Nanoha is a man named Nanohiko. It's too bad the story is abandoned where I actually want to read what romance will male Nanoha has with female Fate or what if there's a fan fiction where Fate is a male and Nanoha is a Female?
Isn't that will be interesting? :D
Sammiechan89 where are you? Are you stopping to write because of some comments you get? Uhhh please just ignore them.. Please finish your someone like you. There's saying.. Ignore those who hate you just think of those who love you. Just think of us who like your stories please!

I must say reading this story was a guilty pleasure to both help with my hormones and out of sheer curiosity to where this was going. While I can say you did well with building tensions [insert lenny face here], displaying sugary sweet couples and making them happy, and making very interesting couples, if I were to read this story in a more serious and sceptical fashion, I really do worry about you. I can imagine the criticisms you can get with this story, and how many of it can go offending some people. You should not feel bad about this, more the people who criticise you should also feel bad because they are lashing out rather than nicely notifying you and explaining their reasons.

Starting off, while I do understand that there are many people out there who really wants a baby without proper reason, to see in the first chapter Nanoha's obsession in having one without properly thinking through it and everyone around her encouraging her rather than explaining how maybe she should wait and questioning why she wants one so bad is quite disconcerting. While I see that she ends up being a good mother here, for the sake of those reading, I worry and I also worry about if you feel such compulsions. Furthermore, in later chapters, when Nanoha says she wants protection before saying she wants a baby, I also worry about Fate's reaction. With the so sweet it's borderline unrealistic and lax premise you have, Fate's reaction of sadness at her assumption that Nanoha not wanting another child with her was not so surprising. Yet, because it was written, I worry about your thought process and hope that you do some family planning before thinking of having a child and ask if you want one because you really do want one, if you can have one, and if you are ready for one, not because your body and external pressures tell you to. To sum it up, I'm worried because the Nanoha and Fate of this story seem to be the type of people who want babies just because their bodies want them, because it seems to be the norm, and the I must say (and I apologise) crappy reason of "showing your love but in a physical form". They are so rushed and rash in doing this without a plan, and I hope you are not of the same thought pattern.

Another issue that I found with the main premise is the fact you identified Nanoha here as a lesbian. In this case, wouldn't it be more apt for her to now identify herself as pansexual. The whole penis thing here but her being identified as a lesbian can really rub other lesbians the wrong way. While I know you identify yourself as a lesbian too, and I'm not questioning it, and is fine with this whole futa thing, it can really send the wrong message to others. One of which being: despite liking girls, we still need a penis to feel completely pleasured or are actually still attracted to the appendage. Yes, this may not be your message, and I'm sure it wasn't, but this is an interpretation others may get.

Lastly, I must beseech you and all readers who are taking this story seriously to really do your research on just sex in general and having it for the first time. I want to highlight that not all women bleed during their first time. Please search up about this and note that depending on her age, if she was pleasured enough, if they took it slow in opening her up, and if she was lubricated enough, bleeding doesn't always come right after. You are falling for the most common and most untrue myth about sex, especially with how you have clearly made the link of their bleeding being due to their first time. I also wanted to put out how Nanoha here seems to still feel pain despite having been pregnant and giving birth! (Although I am putting a disclaimer here and fully am open to arguments about this because everyone is different). Furthermore, with how you've described it here, it gives the false impression of condoms being REALLY being faulty, when they aren't AS susceptible to breaking as you seem to write it here, especially when they are used properly. I would suggest you to rephrase this issue. I really hope people reading this story aren't falling for this myth and are solely learning from this story. (I also would like to push you away from using male targeted porn as your possible base for your rated M scenes. I can see you actually doing that in your story with how it's written).

Lastly, and this is off the topic of my main point of offensive themes you may be unknowingly putting in your story, the interaction between all the couples are really sweet. As in unrealistically sweet. And Faye's character–unrealistically innocent and well behaved for her age. Sure we can choke it up to Nanoha's amazing parenting, but damn, everything is too perfect here. I hope you don't have this expectation as something that can be and should be achieved in reality. It's almost never like this. But then if this was just done because the story wasn't supposed to be THAT serious and just a full comedy and chill story, then that's fine. I just wanted to break that down for you.

Please don't get me wrong with this review. I am okay and rather interested in futa stories, especially when done well. I can see this story was written with harmless intentions, but since this is a story written quite seriously instead of a random one-shot meant to turn us all on with its steamy and hot goodness (I unabashedly admit to indulging in many those myself and admit to reading this story solely for this reason), I wanted to give you an equally serious review and just inform you of how this could be interpreted to other people.

Anyway, this is where I stop reading. It was fun reading when the story was very lighthearted. I'm not too much a fan of drama, especially with where this is going now. I hope you the best with your future stories :D

(On another note, I feel like one of the biggest reasons you wanted this story to become a futa is because you wanted to give Nanoha and Fate the ability to have children. May I suggest you to make an AU where they figured out how to extract the genetics out of an egg/sperm and place it in the opposite sex cell required to make a pair and then do an in vitro? Also, do their parents not know what a phone is or a doorbell and have the basic courtesy of informing the hosts of their plan of coming? Do they know what locks are? jkjk)

Give me an update plz

I love it

No problem, now shut the f**k up femtard.

I am aren't I? No shut up femtard.

Bite me fangirl.

This is garbage you futa freakshow.

Raunchy runs in the family I see, lol.

Amazing chapter! I wasn't surprised when I found out where Lindy brought Fate after reading the title of the chapter. Also, out of curiousity, if Nanoha was at the club in the end, does this mean she was there the whole time Lindy and Fate was? Anyways love the story, can't wait for the next one! xD