I like the metaphore of the roses. It really sparked my imagination as to what Sarah's situation/future might be. I am new to the Jareth character, but from what I could read in these chapters, I already think he is going to be a lot of fun :)

Really like your story, can't wait for the next update :)

That was a heavy chapter. But, I loved it, as usual. Can't wait to see what happens next!

KS, Choices choices is quite the unexpected triumph.

You pass! _

Your depictions of the characters so far were flawless and I am looking forward to reading the next few chapters. :)

Did Sarah make the right descision by accepting Jareth's offer?

Or would it have been better if she hadn't?

Obviously her family would be saddened after Sarah left the mortal coil, but then... Sarah herself probably would have been free.

I guess, now, we will just have to wait and see what may happen next. _

I thought you'd given up on this story but glad to see you haven't! Your writing is brilliant and I love where you are heading with the story :)

awesome chap love the roses. Looking forward to 4

Nice! Though I didn't really get the 13 connection...

Sorry I didn't review sooner, migraine that last day plus...

Thanks so much for the kudos at the end, *blushes*

I've done my best here to give her serious and honest concrit. "All opinions are the reviews only and do not represent the station as a whole" :o)

Okay...so lots of info here, you're probably wondering *read stressing* why barely any reviews on this chapter when you started so strong on ch. 1.

Overall I think it was a good chap, but lacking the strength of the previous, and not just emotionally. You throw a lot of info out there (which is okay) but you're grammar this chap is less brief and efficient than chap 1. By using weaker verbs and grammar you lessen the emotional punch.

you wrote. "Sarah tried to nod but was once again thwarted by her neck brace which was quickly raising her stress levels even further due to frustration."

Very long sentence which could be trimmed down.

EX- Sarah tried to nod, but the neck brace thwarted her again causing frustration and further escalating her stress.

Two main rules of creative writing: description and brevity. Always shoot for brevity, but be willing to sacrifice it only for the sake of description. Try to eliminate was/had/have/etc whenever possible-makes stronger sentences

I think it made an important chap less interesting to read and more difficult for most readers to review since most want to say something positive. However, there was nothing particularly strong this chap. even though you wrote good info.

Medical: overall it's good, but I've got a few twitches that got me. You have Sarah undergo a full body CAT scan then the doctor orders a head CT for the next morning.

A CAT scan and a CT are the same thing. The way you've written it makes it sound like she's receiving two different procedures because of a suspicious of a head injury. Which is a good reason to repeat a CT or a order a different procedure such as an MRI. But the doctor's phrasing is faulty.

The nurse states that she's not receiving any food, any reason for this? A patient that is alert and oriented to normal state (which she appears to be) and is otherwise able to swallow and is not schedule for surgery or in immediate risk for emergency surgery is generally allowed to eat at least a liquid diet. (foley cath for urine collection and no bowel to worry about) If any surgery is schedule they can go NPO (no oral intake)for at least 8 hours prior to surgery. IV nutrition is limited at best and they would want her gastrointestinal tract in miminal working order since the pain meds would be slowing it down tremendously.

The receptacle that the nurse disposes of the needle and syringe is call a 'sharps container' and they're always red, hard plastic. Just FYI.

"we were only able to address your initial injuries and get you stable"

Generally, common medial lingo is 'stabilized' and if she's been stabilized than she should be in no immediate risk for emergency surgery and therefore able to eat a liquid diet.

Policies in hospitals vary, but in the major medical region I work in and in the busiest, top neurological ICU in Houston they still allow family and friends(up to three at a time) to visit throughout business hours at 5-15 min intervals, every hour on the hour. (I personally know this not only as a medic, but a good friend was a patient a few years ago.) So the 5 min visit from her father only once a day seems very, very minor, Poor Sarah!

As far as the 26 connection...creepy! Making me wonder if the 'car wreck' has a external cause? Hmmm? Nothing like putting you nemesis into a position of weakness, huh?

i wonder what's gonna happen on sarah's 26th. i'm also curious about jareth's true intentions. I really can't wait for the next chapet. thanks for writing.

this is pretty good so far. I wonder what jareth's true intetions are. I hope that sarah will get better soon. I love this story so far. it's so epic. keep up with the good work and update again as soon as you can.

Great story you've got going so far. I can't wait to read what happens next. You've really got my curiosity piqued with the 26 hours thing. And I love how you've written Jareth-mysterious and frustratingly evasive, exactly how I picture his character.

I have no idea what Jareth is on about with the 26 hours thing.

Bit of an ass here making Sarah jump and agrovating her injuries.

Still everyone seems IC and the mystery of what's going on is definitly keeping me interested.

I really liked this chapter! It really has me intrigued about the next one. Can't wait!

Oooo this is interesting! Excited for the next chapter.

Looking good so far. Only, why does Jareth blame her for getting hit by a truck? Hmm...I'll have to wait and find out, I guess.