Ash and Misty - Oh no, not another insufferable love hate relationship.

Boooooooooooooooo

Aw, really fluffy.

For Pokeshipping, I think that's their thing to fight but really care about each other (even if they don't admit it.)

Missing Punctuation. Again. (Wags finger).

And how does one hear another guy smirk?

That was Turreble

Misty certainly looks better with her hair down. I liked how you added your own spin to a classic trope by having togepi and pikachu address Ash and Misty as 'mommy' and 'daddy'. Good work.

.l that was a thumbs up

Hi :) Nice idea making Togepi be their little Pokemon child. That was cute. And I liked how somewhere in the middle you had it from the Pokemon's point of view. I've been thinking about trying that, because I've seen other people try it, but I'm never quite sure of what I want the Pokemon to say...Anyways, very nice job!

Hello. You asked to R&R so here I am. First off, for a first story, this was alright. I liked the idea of Togepi crawling over to Ash at night because it looks at him as its daddy. That was cute.

Now, in terms of grammar and sentence structure, there's A LOT that could be worked on.

First of all, you need to remember to capitalize the characters' names every single time that they're used because they're proper nouns. There were a lot of instances where Ash, Misty and Togepi's names weren't capitalized.

Second, always start a new line when a character is speaking. That wasn't done here. I haven't read your other story so I don't know if you've fixed this issue or not.

Third, remember to put periods when a sentence ends. I saw complete sentences without proper punctuation.

Fourth, you need to put a comma inside a quotation mark at the end (unless it's a question).

And this sentence...

"I want to apologize Pikachu I really do I" said "but after all the mean and hurtful things I said to her how can I."

...should read like this.

"I want to apologize Pikachu, I really do," I said, "but after all the mean and hurtful things I said to her, how can I?"

There's other things, but these are the big problem areas. I'm not trying to tear you down because you have a lot of potential. These are just ways to help you improve. Oh and thanks for reviewing my stories. I really appreciate it! :)

eh, nothing to special. But it was ok. 7.5