Heyy Good Story ! :)

Hope For More Chapters ! :):)

Mika,,, XxoxoxX ! :):):)

cute like hwo it all came together.:D

So, overall, your plot and some of your idea weren't too bad. Somewhat cliche, but cute at the same time. What I really could not stand was the inconsistencies. Such as you have Rachel at her Dad's, and then she's staying in a hotel, or Lauren is driving, to Lima, then she flew and she's next to Karofsky... that drove me up a wall, and made your story really hard to follow.

I also think you could have developed the plot a little more, added more detail and such. More interactions, more descriptions... the lack of it made it kinda jumpy.

Good start, but go back and edit. Read it out loud to check the flow, sometimes hearing it out loud can make errors obvious. And have a friend read it over as well, they see things that as a creator, you might miss. This can be better, I have faith in you!

Final Chapter? please no no no! if it is write a sequal!

Good little story, i liked to read it !

awe this is soo good(:

i love this story...it was a little confusing at first but its a good story:)

LOVE THIS! :D

M M M please

aww! it breaks my heart to see them both so upset! i hope there is a happy ending! but i love it!

Awww that was so sad but very realistic most writers just do a bam! instant forgiveness i like that you didn't do that! update soon! Puckleberry for the win!

update soon this is really good so far!

LOVE THIS.i cant wait to read more. update soon .

Really good story line! Update soon.:)

What happens next! Can not wait to read what happens next!