Estoy en el error en pensar que suzaku más que amar a Lelouch lo quiere. Como una especie de afecto sincero y tierno pero no amor más bien que está a su lado porque quiere hacer feliz a una persona ?
Me gusta el rumbo de la historia y amo a un Lelouch obsesionado y amoroso con suzaku

Uh, what kind of ending was this...?

Suzaku and Lelouch are so cute together.

I loved this story so much!

More development of both Nunnally and Rolo here - and, I'll admit, it IS a little interesting, and had enough substance to it that, had it been brought in earlier, I might have bought Nunnally being so different here because of her brother complex. Still, like the last chapter, for all the good that came in, it was just too rushed, and it could have maybe used better timing - more insight into Nunnally's devotion (obsession?) with her brother earlier, or a set-up of Suzaku's relationship with Kaguya in a previous chapter to both introduce her AND to maybe have provided more insight into Suzaku's character (maybe she's why he gives in so easily in chapter three to Lelouch's crazy ultimatum - because he grew up with her pushing him around in harebrained schemes?) However, the way things did work out did lead to, if nothing else, neat tie-ups and happy endings for everyone, even if they all end in a Rule of Funny way.
Another thing that bothers me (Just a tad) is how virtually every other character seems to fall off - for instance, in the beginning, it's kind of hinted that Schneizel is trying to run some kind of gambit around Lelouch and Suzaku meeting and that he and Suzaku have slept together (and that Schneizel is kind of a sadist?) and I kept thinking it would come back somehow in the story. Instead, he just shrugs it off, has Kanon stalk them and take blackmail photos (for Rule of Funny invoked above) and does nothing. At least, I wanted to see him goad Cornelia into doing something… but, if nothing else, each conclusion has its own way of fitting - the dialogue between Lelouch, Rolo, Nunnally, Suzaku, and Kaguya is funny, the resolution with Euphie and Nina was… satisfying, if not relatable, and Kanon and Schneizel provided a relatively in character resolution, with just enough crack in there to fit in with the other couples. Overall, this is probably your weakest fic - but, again, it's by no means bad, and the fact that it took me this long into reading your work to find something that I thought was less than good (even two stories before this that I PERSONALLY didn't care for, speaking on the merits of their artistic and storytelling levels, they WERE very good) says something about the quality. I'll see you in the next story!

In this chapter… I hate to say this, but it feels like the story flagged a little - the conclusion that Suzaku comes to seems a little too… quick… The very start of the chapter, he still thinks of Lelouch as a hard-and-fast enemy and tells Rolo (a kid, to his FACE) that he thinks he and Lelouch "are sick fucks". By the end… he's willing to sleep with Lelouch and cooperate and be with him… why? I mean, Nunnally even shows up and gives Lelouch a three-day deadline - couldn't this have been stretched out to fill those three days? Or was it just an excuse to jump to Teh Hawtness in the last part of the chapter (I'm certainly not complaining - it was very hot)
Something good about this chapter - Rolo's character was so, dead SPOT-ON! The lines sounded just as emotionally vacant as the little tykebomb ever was, and it conveyed his personality so perfectly. Also, the fleshing out of Nunnally and Lelouch's relationship was nice - but again, it felt very rushed. I keep wondering if maybe this chapter was supposed to be longer, and f f dot net just ate a few dozen paragraphs somehow… but, either way, it reached it's conclusion way too quickly.

Okay… the 'But' I had in the first chapter comes to a full heading here - namely, the characters in this chapter start to be more sprinklings of their real characters, and completely different creations in their own right. Or, in short, everyone from Lelouch to Nunnally is very OOC. There's… bits… which are still akin to their characters… but they aren't the same, really. And this happened in earlier fics of yours (Disney Princess Lelucia like WHOA!) but those instances were more or less excusable for the tone of the piece - either the fic was silly and goofy, and the characters reflected this, or the piece was a brutal deconstruction of other fics, and the characters came across as alternate interpretations that were, as a result, still somewhat faithful. This story has a premise that is fairly serious (I mean, Lelouch kidnaps Suzaku and keeps him prisoner in order to explore his psyche and convince him to get better - The only way to make that silly would be to have CC as the fairy godmother providing snarky commentary) and the way the characters act doesn't feel like a 'Oh, I see how, if these were the circumstances, Lelouch might be this way' or 'If one character did this, I can see Suzaku reacting like this'. The first chapter had some potential, that could have worked out differently… but this would not be the way to do it.
But, that's not to say the story is bad - this is still competently written, the plot is airtight, the pacing is decent… this story is actually very good… just not a very good FANFIC. As a piece of fanfiction, it's decent at best, mediocre at worst (and, given you've written really good stuff like 'Red Geass', or really about any of your porn one-shots, I kind of expect your stuff to be better than mediocre - unless this was the very first fanfic you EVER wrote and just didn't publish it until after you had other stuff up, in which case, I'd be willing to lower the bar) My advice? Change the names of the characters and the setting (maybe) and post this as an original story on Fictionpress dot org (fanfiction dot net's sister site) because it's definitely good enough to stand on it's own in that way.

Again, I already know how this whole thing is going to work out, so it's hard for me to go chapter-by-chapter and review… But, here it goes: This is a good setup for what could have been a really good Code Geass (if set in a more realistic world with Suzaku as a superstar and Lelouch as a well-intentioned stalker-with-a-crush) fanfic. The characterization is fit in nicely and it's appropriately shown, not told, through dialogue and actions, and there's a good setup for the story, with just enough vagueness towards the end to hint at what MIGHT happen, without making it explicitly clear and thus, the next chapter holds a few surprises.
That probably sounds ominous, so I'll explain why I used "Could" in the future chapters, and just point out one thing that REALLY didn't work for me - Miss 'Nataly' as she was called in this chapter. It took a few rereads of that scene before I recognized enough tells to realize that, yes, that was Nunnally doing some VERY un-Nunnally like things. I'm trying the best I can to tell myself that girl characters shouldn't be bound by the Virgin-whore trope as they often are (and, in any case, Marianne, Euphie, and the "mysterious girl" whom couldn't possibly be CC because it totally is her are all pretty good subversions of this) … but… maybe it's just the WAY Nunnally goes about it - a complete and total stranger, at a club, in a public restroom (and, technically, she's raping Rolo - I certainly didn't see this boy giving HIS consent) … it crossed a line just a wee bit.
Other than that, this is still pretty good quality, as per usual from you… but…

Wow. This was... quite different than what anything I've read from you so far. Everyone definitely has SERIOUS issues, and yet you somehow managed to keep the tone still lighthearted and managed a somewhat sweet ending.

I have to admit I was pretty confused at a few points. Like why the hell is Lelouch so obsessed with Suzaku when they've never even met? It just all seems really rushed; they meet, have sex, go through a brief torture/angst session, and all of a sudden they're pouring their hearts out to each other in the shower while naked? I'm not sure if it's just the style of writing that this is in, or the fact that it was a collab, but I felt like the story kinda just jumps a lot all over the place, and didn't always make quite add up to what had happened previously. (E.g. Lelouch suddenly going off to call Euphie to say that she was right about Suzaku. There was no real lead-up or explanation as to why he felt he had to call her right there and then; it just felt randomly inserted)

I could tell that there was a lot of back story with Lelouch's family and Suzaku's history, which was well-implied throughout the fic, but I felt that it might have been beneficial to at dive a little deeper and offer a more concrete explanation than just glimpses and theories, because sometimes it felt frustrating to not know what really happened. (I'm not really sure just why Schneizel is out to ruin(?) Lelouch/Suzaku's lives. He just seems like an overarching bad guy without any real explanation as to his motives. Maybe he's just a sadist?)

I really enjoyed how Rolo and Nunnally's interactions went, though. It's refreshing to see Nunnally do a complete 180 and be in control for a change. She is Lelouch's sister after all; surely they have more in common than we think. Also, I liked Kaguya's role at the end; not enough people write about her!

Yay! *claps

Actually, if this had happened in the show (Euphie falling in lurv with Nina), I think Code Geass would've taken a much less depressing turn of events. And I'm glad to see Nina happy. 3

Also, yay Suzaku and slightly psychotic! Lelouch. :D

"Nicely done." Lelouch sighed sadly. "You were right – he's still in fight-or-flight mode." He entered the cage and looked around. The room itself seemed fine – a few crumbs from the cookies, but otherwise clean, but Suzaku had clearly not been taking proper care of himself."

So awesome and morbidly hilarious at the same time. :D

"Wait…" She paused, having finished to process the rest of his speech. "Lelouch, regardless of everything else, you don't lock people in a cage to help them. That's just… I can't even begin to explain how wrong this is."

Perfect.

"Nunnally was torn. She had never faced a dilemma like this before. Nunnally had two rules in her life - support Lelouch in everything he did and never let him place himself into a dangerous situation. She'd never thought those two would become mutually exclusive."

Bam.

Rolo paused. "Would you like to use the handcuffs I brought? They'd made transport easier."

Lelouch smiled. It was just like Rolo to think of those details. "That's a wonderful idea. Thank you Rolo."

Bam.

"As for the house, he was surprised that Lelouch hadn't made a connection between the name 'Schneizel' and kennels in the basement. Suzaku didn't know who of the two was worse: the clueless or the well-versed one. Both were terrifying. Good thing they didn't seem to get along. The duo would have been too much for even him to handle."

Schneizel and Lulu teaming up. Meheheheh... :D

Awesome everything else goes without saying. D

So cute! Update soon!

to be honest this one confused me alot. haha but it was so good

Oh Schneizel and Kanon...again...:)

This version of Lelouch was interesting, and though he has some...issues, he's so sweet.

Nunnally was also...interesting, :D

Thank you for this story.

Hmm, this was delightfully insane? I really don’t know how else to word it. What amuses me is how /light-hearted/ the tone of the fic is at times, really belying all the creepy and scary things going on here.

Because I don’t think anyone could have qualified as sane in this fic. From Suzaku’s self-destructive tendencies, to Lelouch’s gentle yet scary possessiveness to ... Nunnally and Rolo’s brother complex, everyone here is on the wrong side of extreme XD. And yet, I have to say I enjoyed this, even though this fic is very strange. But ... I think that’s you two were aiming for: this combination of eerie creepiness mixed with fluff and humour.

I admit, I really loved the poignancy during the few times Lelouch and Suzaku did talk seriously. I really liked that, despite all the hostage and creepiness, we actually did get to see a relationship develop, and Lelouch seems to *genuinely* care for Suzaku (though creepy remains creepy XD).

I loved the shower scene – Suzaku talking control of the situation, the way he just wanted to be with Lelouch: all that was beautifully written, especially because it seemed more genuine and real than the first time they had sex (I loved the contrast between a Suzaku who just did it because it didn’t mean anything, and a Suzaku who embraced Lelouch because he felt something for him other than lust).

I’m still not quite sure what kind of relationship Lelouch and Suzaku are going to have. It’s obvious that both of them have SERIOUS issues going on, and – even if this ended on a fluffy note – I do predict quite a number of problems. Or therapy sessions. Suzaku’s are more glaringly obvious, but Lelouch – I must say that he seems rather sane on the outset, but ... the way he, naively, thinks he can fix other people makes him dangerous.

You can applaud yourself as one of the few set of writers who made me like Rolo. Really. I liked him here. Maybe, because even if he was still obsessed with Lelouch, it seemed less ... frightening than in canon, and you actually had him develop something more to his personality than a Lelouch complex. I liked his growing attraction to Nunnally.

Ah yes. Nunnally was interesting in this fic. Sassy and ... with a temper. And, probably along with Euphy, one of the more well-balanced people in this fic. At least, she had common sense enough to realise that keeping someone locked up in a cage isn’t healthy XD.

(But you do realise how strange a fic is if you call someone with a brother complex and slightly sadistic impulses ‘well-balanced’, lol.)

I liked the humour in this fic. Because, otherwise, I think this would have been much darker fic, and the ending wouldn’t have been as ... reasonably happy? And yet, there was some lines that really touched me, especially the little note about Arthur being Euphy’s gift :/

And poor Euphy, really. I love the girl and the fact that you didn’t gloss over how much Suzaku’s leaving her hurt her ... made me sad. But I’m glad she seems to have found someone who really likes her, though a bit of that bittersweet pang remains because a sweetheart like her shouldn't have suffered so much in the first place.

(Does Lelouch use some weird recipe for those cookies XD?)

Awww, I'm lovin the rolonuna and euphynina 3

Why mush it be over DX