that was and excellent story i will decently be adding it too my top fan fiction collection i am curious as to what the seqell is going to be one complaint however in my opinion you did not make the fight between vegeta and freza adequately long and did not describe that part in detail like you did with the rest of the story. outer than that it is a rely rely really good fanfict keep up the good work. you should be proud of your work i am excited to read the seqell.

vegeta needs to let out his anger and becime a ws a great chapter and so far a great story keap up the good work.

that was a good chapter although i thought the fight with freza should have gone on longer.i wonder ho ticked off vegeta is with bulma right now great chapter keap up the good work. chchi was kakerots reason to transform into a super saiyan.

this is going to be a good fight but that happened in the middle of goku and vegeta mating with bulma and what about freza blowing up the planet will that happen if so how would it be prevented.

that is if he ever asked did not stay around long enof to here the rest of what she said if he did she would be over joyed.

i hope things get better between kakrot and chchi and vegeta and bulma. more importantly wene the king finds out that his son picked a 3rd class he will probably freak out.i personally think mixing of the classes is a good idea.

the story is rely good in my opinion i am exited to see were you take this story and you should not ever put yourself down.i think a lot of the times people are better than they think they are the reason we cannot see our own good points is because we are very critical of our own self. keap up the good work

they should have some respect that is the king they are talking about.

i loved that chapter iwonder waht will happen next

i like fics were vegeta is on his home planet and kakrote is their with him. great dicription and detail in the fanfict so far keap up the good work.

Bulma is amazing

interesting..

I’m not exactly a fan of Kakarot/Chi-Chi fanfics. I do not hate them, at all, but I dunno… I guess I’m just way too wary of Saiyans since they are such a brute and sadistic race. However, I have to say your fic was pretty nice, mostly because everyone was fairly in character. There were some discrepancies with personalities in some moments, but I understand it was necessary since it’s and AU and the Saiyan universe no less. So yeah, good job.

I liked the tension and action you add, specially at the end with Freeza’s invasion attempt. As I pretty much figured since the beginning, Kakarot was going to be the first one transforming into Super Saiyan, je. Sorry, I just love seeing Vegeta’s pride being crushed. It’s one of my life pleasures. And as a hardcore Gochi shipper, I gotta say I enjoyed their moments a lot more than Vegebul, specially since I’ve never read any fanfic of them, but still, vegebul’s scenes were nice.
Again, nice fic. I’ll see if I can read the sequels. Take care.

So far, So good!

This chapter was brilliant!