Love it its good

It would be nice if you had enough respect for your readers to label this as containing an OC. As it clearly has the beginnings of GIANT MARY SUE written all over it, I'll pass.

This story is just too good! :D :D :D :D

I love this story!

OMG! I thought we had lost you! Glad you are back! While reading this chapter, I felt like I was wrapped in a warm fluffy blanket. You haven't lost your touch!

Yay so happy to see this :3

Your story is amazing and I can't wait for the next chapter. But FYI small side note Evan is USAF not a marine lol

Its taken me forever to get back to this. I was not disappointed. This was a fantastic chapter. *sniff sniff* still wiping the tears from my eyes. :))

Wow! wasn't sure we would ever hear from you again. Welcome back! I don't care that Lorne has nanites floating around in him. I'm just happy that you didn't kill him or Carson off. Who would take care of his "wee turtles"?

Great chapter. Poor Evan, teetering on the edge there, so sad but thank goodness Cass arrived when she did and told him about our beloved Carson. Killing him off of all people would have just been way too cruel so I'm happy you didn't lol.

Missed your updates glad your back and hopefully not working so hard...well I know you are but take care of yourself missy

Nat xxx

Fantastic story. Passionate, and well thought out. Great character development.

Althoug I like the story, there are certain things that really annoy me. For one, please look up the difference between your (possessive pronoun) and you're (you are). I don't know if English is your mother tongue, but it is really not that difficult. And making these mistakes makes you look as if you haven't mastered the language at all. The same goes for the difference between there - their - they're. Using these correctly would make reading this story so much better. I really enjoy the plot, but every now and then you use one of these words wrong and it really confuses me.
Also (although I think it's not as annoying as the your/you're thing), when someone says something like "I love you, John" and there is a name at the end, you need to use a comma before that.
Here are some - hopefully helpful links:
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*mouth hanging open* stranger things have happened... lol only on Atlantis!

Glad Lorne was saved...just hope those Nantes behave! But where did Lorne go?! Dont think Cass should be so mad...afterall That she and John have been thru...she should be happy there was a way to save Lorne! if it had been John, I betcha she would have considered doing the same! Please update soon!

Hello!
Catching up with the story after quite a long time! I love that John is finally a father, but it was so sad that his little baby daughter had to go thru so much! Now, John will make up for that and keep her safe forever more! Sad that Lorne is dying, but Rodney has a plan for that! Looking forward to more!