Plot holes!

Could have used the time stop powers way more and avoided hurting anyone at all.

Last chapter got cut off, so we don't know anything about the time traveler. No backstory about him.

Rhea, Gaea and Hera didn't join the fight.

I think the domains they receive have to be somehow related to them, and Thalia does not strike me as a person who is especially good at wielding every type of weapon or good at tactics (not that that mattered because the only power she ever used during the fight was a thunder bolt), hence she shouldn't have been the God of War.

Would'v thought that the fates would dhow up at some point with this much happening. Least they could do was announce some titles.

Nico and Thalia's relationship kinda developed a lot without any real indication of why they were attracted to each other.

The war from the beginning was completely one sided. Percy didn't use his time powers at all, as Artemis' 'minor' time powers were already powerful enough to freeze everyone on the battlefield, including multiple gods and titans. If Percy used his time powers which are on a higher level, he might as well be able to defeat every primordial.

Gaea shouldn't be able too bestow enough power to make them titans. She also pretty much gave Percy have the powers of a true deity who is pretty much automatically win any battle, going by the power comparison of Artemis' time power to Percy's (if Artemis' minor time domain could freeze Hades who had the power equivalent to Ouranos, and other titans at the same time like Nico, who probably had the same amount of power to Hades, then Percy who has time as his main (major) domain, I don't see how he couldn't pause time for Chaos).

What does that mean "she's probably giving it up right now"?

Every part of this was sloppy or rushed. You have some characters so painfully OOC I feel like I'm having a heart attack. The grammar mistakes are everywhere, it's disgustingly sappy, and the way you've gone about bring the Pertemis in this story makes me like Reylo better(Kylo X Rey) AND I HATE THEM! You have spent no time on real character development and no time in actual careful plot development. The concept of Percy being married to Artemis, getting most of the gods against him with a few siding with him as well as the Titans and Gaea is a good idea. You just shouldn't be the one to execute it. Great concept, fucking god awful writer. One of the worst I've ever read. (Guess I shouldn't expect quality content most of the time.

Father no.

*singing to let it go tune* suck my dick, suck my dick, suck my dick!

Owsum

Nice
But what about annabeth?

AWESOME! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE WRITING! IM BEGGING YOU!

I love this story can you please make the chapters smaller.

my favorite fanfic and i like the idea of percy as a titian

A happy ending! :D

Well, Thalia, you are siding with a mass-murdering asshole for pretty much no reason other than he is closely related to you by blood despite having, I think, not ever meeting him in your life. Against someone who would not only be an amazing king, but make the world a far better place. Clearly your power hungry fatal flaw has taken you for a ride.

Not bad. read the entire thing through, and when I read the 5 chapters, I was impressed. The character development was a little rushed, and Artemis directly started loving Percy, but other wise, not bad. Liked the story idea!

BEST FANFIC EVER! update give up for adoption ls

not bad