archie and maxie team up!

are you insane ash?
probably...

arceus's pov
i want ash to win!
*helps ash*
*goes to victory celebration*
*creates new universe for ash*
you get the idea...

This is the second time I’ve read this story. I only reread stories that are really good, so wonderful job!

I was afraid it would end in a similar way to this, and against my hopes, it did. The first half of this fanfic was okay, but halfway through it just suddenly turned terrible, as if a different author took over. I don't know what you're intention was with this fic, what all actually happened, or what all was just in May's head. But I know that based on the second half, I'm glad you don't own Pokemon, and I hope the Pokemon Company is never foolish enough to hire you. My apologies, but that's the way it is.

Why'd you skip the rest of the Royal Cup? I'd like to know what happened? Did Relena have everyone who lost spared because she still wants to use them for something? Why did Pikachu, Glaceon, and May laugh and say that Ash got burned by his Pokedex when it wasn't even talking about him? Why didn't Ash point out that Muk can control its poison? Why does May even want to dance with Ash when Lucas is at the ball? Why would Pikachu think that Ash would think that he would forget Volt Tackle?

I was so happy when Ash finally started to give May what's she had coming to her for so long. I can't believe it not only didn't last, but May actually had the strength to throw Ash out of the hotel, and after getting back in Ash actually apologized to her. For what? How did May expect her friends, other than Relena, to keep Ash out anyway? And in the Author's Note you tell Advanceshippers to stay tuned. What Advanceshipper is going to enjoy this fic, or read it this far? I'm sorry, but it's the honest truth.

I don't understand Ash's shock over seeing that Zander has a shiny Lugia. If it wasn't shiny, then I'd understand, and be shocked myself. I also don't understand why Charizard started being disobedient again during the ice sculpting, and then said he would've been fine participating if Ash had intended it to be a sculpture of the old May. Shouldn't the Atlantica Islands judges find an aggressive performance more appealing than a graceful one? And why did Ash want or care if May wore that swimsuit or not?

Why did Pikachu tell Ash off for asking a perfectly reasonable question about having to wear ninja outfits, and hit May with Iron Tail, though I'm not complaining about the latter, lol. And for that matter, why is Ash complaining about having to wear a ninja outfit in the first place? And what Pokemon did he use during the Phantom Gym battle? I'm also confused about the whole issue with the Elite Four. Finally, I presume Ash isn't actually planning to stay with May for a whole year, is he?

Okay, why did Ash, David, and now Jonathan marry May, Rena, and Abelia respectively? And why won't they divorce their wives, take custody of their children, leave the Atlantica Islands, and come back with an army to get rid of the corrupted region? Why isn't Diantha attempting the same thing? And for that matter why does Relena think it's safe to tell any outsiders about her region? Also, why is Nastina seeking revenge on Ash? Him, Misty, and Brock had no part in her plans failing.

I'm guessing Darius was kicked out of his tribe before they tried to get Meowth to rejoin, but how did he get all the way to the Atlantica Islands? How could Glaceon have laid Pichu eggs, and more than one egg at a time? Why do Relena and May have to give birth at sea? Why and how was May expecting Dario? Was she in cahoots with him? Why is Latias willing to be Pikachu's steed after the mouse betrayed and left Ash? Aaron died centuries before Delia was born. He can't be her father.

Why did Rena have her Delphox hit David with bricks in the disclaimer? He didn't do anything wrong there. Why is Ash okay hanging out with May, yet has a problem just hearing about Iris? There's no question who treats him better. Wouldn't it make more sense for Perry to be a Psyduck than a Dewott? How did David and Rena get out of Lady Rena's gym alive after losing? Nothing to do with Team Magma in this chapter makes any sense at all. You spelled Lara's name wrong. Nothing personal.

If Arceus wasn't going to give Victini a well deserved lecture then what was the point of even showing up? Why did May get so defensive when Mewtwo stated his amazement about Pokemon with human forms? It's a perfectly legitimate thing to be amazed about. It's not like Mewtwo said he didn't believe her "best friend" as she calls Relena has a Suicune father. Why is Jeanette suddenly turning down the godmother position? Being in the hospital for awhile shouldn't prevent her from being a godmother.

Since when can May read minds? And why is it she never tells anyone else when she hears villains scheming against them? How come she kept battling the Invincible Pokemon Brothers after seeing what happened to the first one, and vice versa? Why didn't they team up against the Litwick and Lampent? How can Rock-types attack an underwater submarine, and Mewtwo fight back underwater? And how does Victini expect to be both May's Pokemon and Cynthia's wife?

Not only is May not telling the others when she hears someone spying on them, but Ash isn't telling them either. The people of the Atlantica Islands are willing to murder anyone who steps out of line without hesitation, and May thinks it's a good place to live and raise a child! Not only that, she suddenly she thought she was having breakfast in bed while she was outside talking with the others!
And why are all these old adversaries suddenly obsessed with murdering Ash and May anyway?