Aw that was sweet! I loved it! Great job!

u r awesome

That was beautiful! Amazing story! Great job! You should write more Hoot fanfictions! _

Not bad for a first. Gotta start sometime. I like it. :)

Yo. It's me. Great story! Glad you're branching out from your Narnia/Grey's Anatomy obsession xD

Something about the opening sentences bug me. Not sure what...perhaps the placement0 of adverbs?

Also, in the paragraph begining with "Bit by a dog at the lot", there's a small grammatical error at the end of Mullet Finger's quote. See if you can figure it out.

Anywho, good story. :D Not quite up to your usual standard...but good. Love it!

Much love,

GLA