In al the years I have been reading fanfic this is only the second fic with evil alice. Not that i mind. It is a wonderful story!

please update

Where is the rest I loved this story?

I think it’s kinda funny that they fuck a few times and now there in love I mean come on

I’m assuming they used a condom but u said “he spilled inside me” so is she on birth control or is she neutered or something I don’t understand how she’s not pregnant.

Where the complete story

so first off chapter 2 is just as bad as the 1st.
Who sleeps with a man...not knowing him AND USES HIS FUCKING TOOTH BRUSH IN THE MORNING?

second, bring up that you have something to tell him that no one else knows...but you will only tell him LATER if he an be trusted? attention seeking much? why even mention it? you dumb fucking bitch!

the ending of chapter 1? SOOOO fucking gay...
oh angel...this so much more to me...
puke

Are you going to finish this story

who the fuck talks like that ?
no one suspects that I EDWARD CULLEN AM A MAFIA BOSS..

?
WOULDNT HE JUST SAY NO ONE SUSPECTS ME OF BEING A MAFIA BOSS? THAT WHOLE...I EDWARD CULLEN SHIT NEEDS TO FUCKING BEING ERASED

HOW EMBARRASSING FOR YOU, SO MANY MANY MISTAKES

bella had tears streaming down her face...because Edward bought her dinner...? LOL yaaaa that makes sense...stupid.

the whole...I was abused nightmares? so dumb. shes had YEARS to deal with that shit...seriously like 7 fucking years! and shes still having nightmares? in 7 years youd think she would come to terms ya know?
your story is really starting to bother me...I don't think I can continue to read it. thanks anyway

I hate the way they speak to each other..
"can we stop by my place so I can grab some things?"
"Yes, we can stop by your place so you may grab some things"

its so robotical...and lets talk about what a huge fucking pussy bella is. one mention of a mom, Edward only asked if her mom taught her to cook...and she breaks the fuck down? REALLY? make her vunerable...sure...but don't make her a fucking pussy who has NEVER dealt with her shit its fucking pathetic.

their whole "love" story is unfolding WAYYYYY to quickly so quickly that its actually ruining your story

bella tells Edward that her mouth felt NASTY so she used his toothbruth...and then her body felt NASTY so she used his shower...and then she winks at him? what was the wink for? it seemed so out of place I wanted to slap bella for being a dumb ass...first of all I don't care how unbelievable your one night stand was you don't use his fucking toothbruth without permission...and you sure as FUCK don't put on his clothes without asking...what a stupid cunt bella is.
and then that shit she said...theres things no one knows about me...but I'm not gonna tell you until I trust you...(then why even fucking bring it up drama queen?) then she leads that bullshit with...not even alice or rose know...um ya no shit? cause you just fucking said NO ONE knows so of course I took that as NO ONE KNOWS...lol why not list ALL the people that don't know jackass?

I know this is fiction but shit at least make it a little bit believable!
How you got to over 1000 reviews is beyond me especially with the bad use of grammes. I guess there is no accounting for some people's tastes. Either that or people's standards have lowered a shitload!

he does know he can't keep ruining her clothes