awesome story! totally loved it!

this is a great story and its so cute! but just a quick little thing. you keep saying his for the conjugation but the word is actually he's. the sentence I found it in was "but you shouldn't especially to us, especially to Ben Riley, his-" she looked at me "his your father" she finally said. his should be he's. sorry that was just bothering me a little. Great story though keep writing! :)

oh my god i think i got a cavity from the sweetness 3

There's something very cute about your writing and I enjoyed your story very much. Its completely innocent and I love it. I hope you write more Ben and Riley father/son soon.

Good chapter. I loved the father/son interaction.

Love this story!

Its so cute. Btw, what is Ben's full name and is Riley David Poole Riley's real name. You should do one with Ben sick and Riley taking care of him.

Ok, this reminds me of the time my little sister was really naughty and my mom broke a bamboo spoon on her butt.

this was a decent story. I figure english is not your first language so some of the grammar and misspellings were easy to overlook...

one thing I want to point out though is ammonia is not a sickness. ammonia is a very strong chemical cleaner commonly used to clean toilets...

pneumonia on the other hand is a very serious disease that typically starts out with cold symptoms and blows up when left untreated and can be very dangerous.

This is not a negative review. I applaud your writing efforts and think that there is good premise here and wish you the best :)

OMG I JUST LOVE IT! AWESOME TO THE MAX! PERFECT! GREAT! EVERY POSITIVE WORD IN THE DICTIONARY! LOVE IT! _

it was a good one and he did earned it thanks