| Reviews for A Magical Contract |
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   Cirque de reves chapter 7 . 7/7/2012 Madeleine de Bricassart is Isis, isn't she? |
| linkena chapter 12 . 1/27/2008 nothing to comment on...commendable that you managed to finish the story, something I have tried hard to do but never suceeded.. ~! |
| linkena chapter 11 . 1/27/2008 By Jove I've got it? Way too cliche! Some grammar mistakes, might consider a beta to reform and repost? Would get more notice and more reviews that way *wink* ~! |
| linkena chapter 10 . 1/27/2008 Just fluffy nonsense because I can't think of anything to write..] Don't take me too seriously...I like my little joke ~! |
| linkena chapter 9 . 1/27/2008 Aha, confirmed my suspicions. This Madeline is Isis. I take you are quite a zest in Egyptian mythology? Have I been writing linkena in email instead of name? I shouldn't have. ~! |
| linkena chapter 8 . 1/27/2008 Very seducing chapter. Wasn't Isis some Egyptian Goddess? Married to Osrisis or something? Hardly a slave, begging your pardon. |
| linkena chapter 7 . 1/27/2008 Interesting perspective of Oliver. Cold. Impersonal. Not Warm. Funny... |
| linkena chapter 6 . 1/27/2008 Still think Draco would be better for the job. |
| linkena chapter 5 . 1/27/2008 It seems quite peculiar and baffling to me why Snape is in Egypt, absent from his post as Potions Master at Hogwarts. The essence of HP fanfics is that your story can take place any time, 1st book till 6th book, quite a span, quite a choice of who dies and who does not. Shall I give you my support for writing Oliver/Hermione even though the appeal is scant? Yes, I guess so. The last paragraph seems haste, though the last sentece is very...stylish. ~! |
| linkena chapter 4 . 1/27/2008 If I may sound so very improffessional: I really do hope Oliver breaks loose of this dreadful company spell...it's...getting to his head p ~! |
| linkena chapter 3 . 1/27/2008 Is it me and my lack of linguistic abilities or is the last line of this chapter too hard to decipher? Anyway, some paragraphs would seem a good idea, however, i know how hard that is. 3 sentences on Word would look like one and half here... Who is Madeline? It would be a good idea to introduce your thoughts before just stuffing them in... You might want to add more description about Hermione's classes...just to lengthen it out. Also thoughts in stars (*s) are not very formal...italics with "" would be better.. Constructive Criticism ~! |
| linkena chapter 2 . 1/27/2008 It seems strange does it not, that Oliver has given up Quidditch? Quite the debonair career oriented man eh? Why choose Oliver for this character? Draco would have been more suitable...If you want to reach me, I am Midnight_whisper on Fanfiction.. ~! |
| linkena chapter 1 . 1/27/2008 Hey, You're story is good. Slightly higher than mediocre if i may say so...but that is only my own opinion. Your use of language is good, however, you might want to simplify your vocabulary at some parts, for example, the part where Hermione left. Very verbose and somewhat poetic...hard to understand. Also, even though this is only a matter of speculation, I do not think Ginny would have any slight attraction towards the PotionS master (note the S), I am not a fan of OOC unless it's Draco. I have always despised Snape. Sometimes your flow seems disturbed. For instance Harry and Snape's meeting, hardly any description and then we jump to Ginny. Why are Harry and Snape unconscious? Though the dark side of Harry and his inability to inflict pain on Ron is very well described. This darker side of Harry...I like. Hoping you will not hate me ~! |
| pstibbons chapter 2 . 6/27/2007 Good - glad she's breaking off her contact with Harry and Ron and going for something higher. |
| molly chapter 20 . 10/30/2006 damn, you're good. one of the best i've read in awhile. keep up the good work. the world would go crazy if there were no good stories |
