needs a sequel

That was a surprisingly well-thought-out gift for everybody's favorite dunse, and Cilan crying at the end was a nice touch. Great work!

This is awesome

I loved the ending, the necklace was perfect, so much more meaningful than some random piece of jewelry, it was really sweet.

this story is awesome but it feels incomplete though can you write a sequel to continue this story ?

I 3ed the whole story. But if something was going on between iris and cilan, u should have made 'em kiss like ash dawn.

I love this chapter. But I really want to know... who does Drew like? I have one guess-its May.

Love it it's sooooo cute! I love the ending the most so cute;)

AWWWWW I love this story its so sweet! keep writing :)

First off even though I'm a girl I can relate too Barry I HATE SHOPPING

This was a great story from beginning to end! I like how Ash shows genuine emotion, and has natural sounding dialogue - I could actually imagine Veronica Taylor saying his lines, which is a plus (the same goes for Jason Griffith as Cilan, Eileen Stevens as Iris, Emily Bauer as Dawn, etc., but Ash is harder to get right).

THE ENDING WAS HORRIBLE, TERRIBLE, A CRIME, A FIASCO IT WAS BOMBBERATIC!

Shouldn't we try to be realistic. I'm trying to look at things in perspective. The Volt Tackle move was OOC as Ash doesn't use big moves like that unless they are finishers. And Pikachu has taken worse than that... Much, MUCH worse.

It seems as if Dawn is distracting Ash from the battle more than cheering for him. I'm getting bad vibes.

The theory of May and Drew is Contestshipping.