You are completely correct. Those two are way more laid back in Strikers. Still, I love what you did with them. Nanoha deserved more scenes like this, since for a series which main emphasis is bonds, they kind of like forget about this bond.

Excellent work of fiction, Blissful Turtle.

I think you pulled it off perfectly. Nicely done indeed.

You might want to correct their last name. On the third paragraph you have it as Harlowins it should be Harlaowns.

Keep writing!

Well I like it. Harlouwn family bonding is somewhat rare and this one, while short, was nicely written.

This might not be the best place for it, but I'm wondering if you're interested in writing another one like this, only with Fate, Erio and Caro? Aside from a single panel on Vivid (a nice one, I admit) this one is also rarely touched. Just a suggestion.

Anyway, as I said before, I like it. Pure family moments are always nice.

A very cute one shot. :)

I love reading one shots like this, smaller moments outside of the fighting and such. You write very well and capture the characters marvelously.

Keep up the great writing. :)