Excellent fic :)

I loved it so much! That was simply amazing! Your characterization is really great (same with Infrastructure Will Collapse) , and reading it almost felt like reading the actual books (yeah, I wish the actual books were that slashtastic). That and the flow of your writing is really good as I never once got bored reading the whole thing straight through as I might with something else. Also though the thought of it rather saddened me, I liked your addition of homosexuality being so extremely taboo (and illegal). It made it seem more… realistic I suppose. I mean even views on it now aren’t as open as they would be in a perfect world.

In response to your author’s note at the end, yes! God, yes, I would be interested in more M-rated stories if you choose to write them. More on the explicit side even? Because I’m a pervert lol.

This was an absolute fantastic fic!

I loved your characterization, though Fisk was a tad bit out-of-character. I think you handled the subject matter really well; it was far more believable than simply 'I love him, butomfgdoesheloveme? Lyke. I just doe-nt noo!11'. It was angsty, but not over-dramatic. I loved Michael's realization that Fisk had been masking love the whole time. I love the scene where he watches Fisk's face, noticing the hesitation. As someone in love my best friend, who happens to be aromantic, I can really sympathize with Fisk.

You have a really refreshing style that mixes Mrs. Bell's style with your own flare. There wasn't a single part that I skipped out of boredom, but there was not a time I felt rushed. It was realistic in its pace, and that's a rare skill!

Anyways, thank you for this lovely piece. I really enjoyed reading it and cannot wait for more! And, as a side note, I was just wondering if you would perhaps consider doing a collaboration? If not I understand.

-Shiro

(Also known as PieLuvsU.)

Aww..but I love the angst. I found this story to have lots more themes than your previous ones, and I appreciate themes like these. There really aren't enough Knight and Rogue stories out there. I tried looking for some after you mentioned it's darn hard to find some. For darn sure it is. Haven't found anything outside of ...and most of them are yours. Go figure. I do love how you captured the two. So cute. And I love Jake. That little fact at the end really made me laugh. Thank you for sharing that with me. Happy writing! I can't wait to see your next story about them.

Michael, you oblivious jerk. :c I love Fisk's hesitation at the end.

Yes,writemoreadultfictions,pleasethankyou.

I loved it! They make such a cute couple. I was wondering if anybody had written anything for them. I mean, I knew I was not the only one who thought it was cute. So, please write more. Even if it's not adult stuff, but I love Fisk and Michael. Is Hilari Bell gonna write another book for this series?

There's so much here it's amazing. Michael and Fisk are so in character and you've got it filled to the brim with anger and sorrow and joy and everything in between that it's a wonder that you managed to fit it all into two chapters. I commend you! Bravo! You have this series mastered!

Oh, YES. I have seen this coming! Well, not really, but still! I swear, this story should be included into the series as CANON, because the boys are so in character, and just- wow. The way Michael and Fisk danced each and around each other, was truly heartbreakingly beautiful. I adore this. Yes, please write more...M-rated fics? I will gladly read. )

This is great. I'm estatic that there's at least one micheal/fisk story and even more that its a good one.

Oooh ! I love how you portrayed Fisk in the end ! I wish you'd write a next part ! I can see Fisk being impatient an Michael being hesitant

I'd love to hear from this again !

Loved it!

It was very realistic and even though it saddened me to see these two in pain like that, I was quite happy at the end. They will make it through it all together, they always do!

And Jake was actually a good OC (which is rare in stories) and fit right in. I did find it funny that he ended up with a bigger role than he was supposed to. XD

Well, I cant wait for your next story as I am more of a fun of lighter stories than angst, but they are nice to read once in awhile.

Much Love!

You are a wonderful, wonderful person. Every story you've written so far not only includes one of my favorite pairings ever, but it's a fairly believable and fascinating storyline. Marry me? In all honesty though, this was brilliant and please post anything you write.

I love Michael character in this story. I kept smiling to myself even though I felt really bad for fisk because I was amused by how Michael went from angry denial to friendly denied to jealous denial to I want Fisk for myself.

Loved the story can't wait to see more!

XD YES!

This is exactly perfect-I really loooooove how you characterize Mike's propensity for being a bit thick. XD And the addition of an OC in this case was a nice touch-most authors can't pull that one off well. good job!

If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on, if not, simply ignore the next part. I know I always crave some kind of analysis on my pieces, but I know other authors don't feel the same way so I'll give you the choice to ignore. :)

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CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:

I think that Fisk, in this piece, is just a little too openly devoted. I think in Hilari's novels, she has him being extremely devoted to Mike, but he's always complaining about it. He's always ready to give Mike an earful or fret over him or something, but bitingly. So if you do any more of these (and by the gods, PLEASE DO! THESE ARE WIN!) That's the only thing I might suggest working on.

LOVED IT. Thanks for PMing me earlier to tell me it was posted!