wheres the more to come? and what kind of swing you need? for i want to swing it just for you to remember that there are people who wishes to read the next chapter.

unless someone already swing it then yoi hit your head so hard that you even forget your name. geez what a waste

Ohhh... A new chapter. I like that, I like that a lot. Especially since you have a very developed way to describe things.

This time around however, I notice that you've managed to focus perhaps more on the events unfolding and the dialogues. Which I think is good. I remember saying in previous reviews that you tended to write a lot of surrounding or circumstances rather than direct events. Which itself is fine, but I think that in this chapter it was better combined and it felt like the story moved on a little.

I especially liked the whole Natsui/Kruger thing. It was interesting to see the two interacting and get a better understanding regarding their thoughts and positions towards each other. I think there's a lot of potential there to use for the future. Whereas the relationship between Shizuru and viola is interesting in its own way it's not nearly as interesting and intriguing as the one between Natsuki and her mother. I do must admit that I find it not only weird but slightly confusing to why the two elder females need to have the exact same names. Sure it does happen parents name their kidies after themselves but somehow that both are seem a bit... I dunno weird. But I can cope so don't mind me. I just found it particular odd with Natsuki's mother being already named in the actual story as Saeko, but never mind, like I said.

I also liked that the focus was more on Natsuki over all. Not because I don't like Shizuru it's quite the other way around I rather like her bloodthirsty and very dominant ways. But for once Natsuki seem to be only that, a rebel. Not a rebel with powers that overthrows them all, at the moment at least. And not a rebel that has been granted a higher position in any way, it's more the other way around. I find it interesting, to see her struggle for survival and such when it's clear that she is surrounded with people of higher rank (Shizuru, The Mother, and well even Midori who apparently knows Natsuki more personally) So that's a big plus for the events here.

I also find the events regarding Kruger and Viola more than just interesting. What kind of past did they really have and what are their relationship really about? Many unanswered questions there. But as the good reader I am I will wait patiently for it to come.

But overall I think you did a great job with this chapter. It was intriguing in many ways and I think it made us reader think of what's really going on though we won't be able to actually figure it out.

Ah well, good work and keep it up. But not for us but you

/Kajskk

Damnnnnnnnn, the drama!

Damn, she left Natsuki alone with all of this going on?

I just hope that they will meet already! Maybe include a

Few hot scenes for us! Funny how Shizuru is the hot-headed one here! It makes her more attractive IMHO!

Wahaha! Somehow I can't imagine Shiz as a pup that will howl! Still, I wish they will be reunited soon!

I certainly enjoyed reading the first chap! When I read the line, "have you already been pupped!" I totally smiled!

It was the first time I heard the word. No Shizuru yet! I wonder what you got in store for us! Can't wait!

Good Morning/Afternoon/Night

I like what you've written so far. You have a very down to earth kind of way to write. Yet your style is not very easy, it is rather advanced and you use a lot of descriptions to build up what kind of world everyone is currently living in. While I often see fanfics lacking this very kind of description I might think that you might go a bit overboard with it. No, trust me, what you're writing is good, it's fascinating and it's intriguing. So don't feel you're doing the wrong thing. The "issue" as I see it, is just the lacking of actual happenings. You focus so much of each chapter on giving us more and more descriptions of races, places societies, etc etc, and barely non on actual characters. It makes the story a bit stiff with all this information about a land we trying to picture with very little things happening. When you do focus on character that's when we can start to apply what we've learned from the describing parts. I'd say, that instead of replace anything, just maybe focus a bit more on adding some characters into it so we can follow the story easier. Remember that we, the readers do not see everything as clearly as you do as the author. At this stage we're pumped in with all this information we can't quite apply.

With that said, I do love the actual idea behind the story so far. A world with beasts and creatures mixed, living in different groups with different rules. You have a quite complex idea here. And I hope you don't get confused in it yourself eventually. I'm eager to see what happen to Natsuki that apparently at the moment is a disobedient puppy but apparently has a lot of potential to be more. And Shizuru who already is of higher rank and apparently on the list to replace Midori would anything ever happen. I'm quite curious to see what their relationship really is like. Considering their very different lives and ranks over all. I'd like to see them in action as well, to see more of who they can be when placed in such situation. I'm sure that will come eventually and I'm one of those readers who is rarely in a rush and find long chapters boring. Quite the contrary actually. But anyway.

I'm also awfully curious about Ntsuki's mother for some reason. She seem be strong if she's one of the leaders in the other packs. But why then would she leave her daughter behind to live in poverty and filth? Ah, an interesting concept, that is indeed.

Enough of my blabbering, I have confidence this story can turn out to be excellent, it does have the potential for it.

Until Then

/Kajskk

very nice~~

I wonder what Tate is hiding. When do we get to see Reito? Gotta love Nao. I hope Shizuru and Natsuki get reunited soon.

Wow, this was a pretty well-written and long story. I'm a little surprised it doesn't have more reviews. Well, just keep on writing and entertaining, cause you do have people who are reading 3

I've finally read all three chapters, find it very interesting that humans are hunted.

Each blaming the sins of the world upon humans.

Like it.

Please no more Alyssa I hate that kid, and she's popping up everywhere.

I like this story a lot. Even though the vamp/were thing has been done I like your version. I'm definitely emotionally attached to the characters. Keep up the good work and good luck finding a job.

I really enjoy reading this and I hope you update soon!

Both chapters are awesome will the next chapter have them meet up I would love to see that anyway keep up the hardwork and your story has no problems from what I see _