This is great!

It is amazing and you literally compared Homura to Lucifer. Accurate prediction considering you wrote this before Rebellion came out.

Dang, this is good. Really good. I love the idea of the twisty-turny differences between this and the original world, and the sense that Homura’s so tangled up at this point that she can barely keep her head above water. The unreliable internal narration is really well done!

Thank you so much for taking the time to write this and share it with us! I really enjoyed reading it!

I think I’ve fallen in love with your writing. Even though I know this is dead, and you probably won’t see this, I still have to let you know that this story is amazing, you have a talent for crafting a good plot, and the way you express characters’ feelings is magical. I’d point out a million other things that are good about your writing if I knew how to write reviews expressing how much I loved something. Thanks for this

This was such a brilliant story! I'm sad that it's probably dead, but thank you for sharing this much. :)

Brilliant!

Ah, I do love this story. You make PTSD Homura seem so natural, even as she's stumbling around a bit unhinged. And your grasp of Kyoko's character feels great. The use of imagery manages to be dramatic without being melodramatic and the occasional moments of humor punctuate things nicely. Every so often I go and reread what's here.

I don't know if you read these reviews anymore, I don't know if you still live, but thanks for writing what we have here, even if it's unfinished.

Oh and if the use of freak with Sayaka bothers you, you can edit out her last word entirely and just have her say "Madoka doesn't need people thinking she's" and leave freak entirely in Homura's head without even the "F" at the end of the sentence. It would still work from a story perspective. Or you could have put it in Hitomi's mouth, she's got some kind of weird complex about girls loving girls that leaves me entirely unsure how much is a joke and how much isn't.

Just the first chapter and I already love how you made the (seemingly) descent to madness look authentic.
Plus the plot thickens in the last part.
Nice.
So its not just a two-shot of Homura's eventual descent to madness and how it affects her surroundings.

is this story dead are you even still wrting i hope your atleast alive

i remember reading this years ago and it took my breath away as one of my most favorite fanfics, like ever. i still revisit this in hopes of getting an update.

i don't know if you're going to ever continue this story, but i hope you'll someday return like the savior we all need. i can see how it originally started as a homura-centric story and suddenly we have apocalyptic cult, a witch, and lesbians. which is kind of... nice. i love it.

I'm kind of confused but I like your story

This is amazing. Thank you for writing it.

Pssssssssttttttt. Someone's still reading this. I don't know if you know- or even care, but I'm still waiting with baited breath. I am thoroughly intrigued, and the fact you haven't continued for three- now four years- is saddening. I don't know what I can say to get you to continue writing this master piece in the making, but what I can say is how much I've been hurting for more...Take the feeling of unrequited love (Having your nails torn from your finger if physical pain moves you more) multiply it by 50 and that's how much it hurts. Please...Find it in your heart to continue.

"No one ever suspects the magical time-travelling zombie."

That one made my night. I literally laughed. Out loud. I don't normally do that.

So... more?

Well THIS is absolutely heart wrenching. Jeez...

Very nicely done, interesting plot set up, and I'm sad there's no more to it. But what is here is very effective. One of the better tragedy/angst/whatever PMMM fanfics for sure.