| Reviews for Elemental |
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   ColieMacKenzie chapter 1 . 6/1/2014 What a beautiful thing this is! Great use of 2nd person; works very well for this story. The loss of Ryan left a lingering sadness that colored this story, gave it a stark emotionality that guided their actions. But I adored how they still sort of went backwards about the whole thing, keys and clothing at her place before even a kiss but that made it wonderful and so very them, and I loved how they just knew that this was it. |
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/31/2014 Wow! You write C&B so well! I really enjoy your stories |
| belhajaliafrah chapter 1 . 7/25/2013 I loved it ! Thank you for sharing. |
| Twyger chapter 1 . 1/6/2013 Well written, but a tough topic and it made me so sad to read it. The part about Jenny not having room on her lap because the baby, who will not ever meet his father, broke my heart. Thank you for sharing. |
| Rhyolight04 chapter 1 . 4/10/2012 Lovely. Good people. |
| Madwine chapter 1 . 1/17/2012 That's good! I loved the fact that you wrote it with the narrator "I". |
| Wingsss chapter 1 . 9/17/2011 Wow, I just stumbled across this and I am so so impressed. I love the way you did the metal of the star at the start, and the key at the end. It tied things together so well! |
| pynki616 chapter 1 . 8/5/2011 Ok, as well written as that was, it was terrible! They better not ever kill Ryan or Esposito on the show, if it makes me cry to just read about it in a fictional story about a fictional show... Good story, though, terrible as it was... |
| Mathiilde3 chapter 1 . 8/4/2011 This was amazing, I starting crying at the funeral, poor Ryan and Jenny! Oh how my heart broke! I loved the clinging part, it was beautiful! It was just a beautifully written piece, I really liked it! Despite being so sad, it held a hope of promise, it was very sweet! |
| prdnanny chapter 1 . 7/21/2011 beautiful job |
| Kate56 chapter 1 . 7/11/2011 This worked very well. So sad the death was Ryan. Loved the 2nd POV. Sad but sweet |
| Oliver Haley chapter 1 . 7/10/2011 Very insightful. Very moving. Some authors just get it right. You did with this story. Kudos. |
| ajksmusic chapter 1 . 5/4/2011 Holy ball of blubbering mess I am. Sometimes I just wander around this site, linking to stories through other author's favorites, which is how I found this one. And wow. Am I glad I did. This is beautiful. I never thought I would write that about death, but you've managed to take something so heartbreaking as Ryan's death (and I cross my fingers we NEVER see that, ever) and turned it into something so beautiful and real. |
| halaci chapter 1 . 4/6/2011 It's difficult to find words. Excellent. Thank you very much, I will read your other stories too. |
| Van Inactive chapter 1 . 3/18/2011 This was beautifully heartbreaking. I was torn between crying and celebrating. Great work! |
