I really liked your story! And the ending was very good! Thinking about a sequel ...

Wonderful job writing this. It is nice to see M/L fics once again. Oh how we've missed them. ;)

Ahhhhh. I love this. Well-written and gives me a good feeling at the end, too. Max's turning to Logan for comfort, Logan being so gentle with her, the kiss...wonderful. I'm going to bed happy.

Very very good...You did an excellent job capturing their emotions and the dynamics of their relationship. Thank you so much for sharing, and please do contine soon.

yeah, writer's block sucks...even worse is having a bunch of ideas, but then realising that they're all crap...

v. good story! full of emotion, really works.

Great writing - you sure you're only 16? I'm seriously impressed. I much prefer your version to what we saw on the show - it's quite realistic, in terms of characterization and emotion, IMHO. I don't think Logan should have had as hard a time with those pictures Lydecker sent him as he did in the show. The way you've had him deal with it is great. He trusts that Max is the person he's been getting to know and falling in love with, not the little kid in the pictures. Hope to see more from you soon.

Very angstful

hey, i'm trying hard to do some constructive criticism here, but all i can think of is - it's great ! There in't much i can criticize. so keep on going, i love your fics.

it was really good! I liked it a lot!

great job gurl!

"Pollo Loco" was a very deep and emotional ep.

dark, dark and more dark, but it was moving

Your piece is the same way, the emotions are

well played. I've also written a piece post

pollo loco, called "If You Want Me To" on this it out if you wish..but first and foremost I just want to give you props, you rocked on this, don't stop writin'

peace

I liked it a lot. Keep up the work cuz it's so good!

I just wanted to let you know how excited I am that you have written another story. And about my favorite episode.

Hilary, you are somehow able to get Logan's thoughts and feelings better than many other authors. Many of them are good writers and more mature and experienced than you are. But they could learn from you.

Of course, you get Max also, but I think Logan is harder because we don't know him as well, and because he's a man.

I absolutely loved this story. I can hardly wait to read it again tonight before I go to bed.

Thank you so much.

This is so adorable Hilary. :) And it rings so true with S1! You even pulled quotes from the actual ep... Fabulous work, continue, continue!