Fantastic

Loved it _

loved the chase!

Just read this and it was so sweet and fun. You did a good job describing the adventure for her and the end result. Pretty good I liked the story. Hope you will write more when you want to.

great story, you had me chuckling as i was reading (nice to see her get one up on Jareth!)VBG

Well written, ah there is only one wee mistake i spotted, you need to fix this slightly - a comma is needed just afer 'his'...

"He jerked her up by her arms and crushed her mouth against his hands gripped her wrists so her hands could not touch him."

Good luck with your studies and please don't stop writing your one-shots. maybe if enough people ask you would consider a longer story perhaps?