that was ADORKABLE!

Best Jerlita fic ever. Honestly.

This is, by far, the best FanFiction JxA that I have read. I would much prefer this ending to Season 1 than the one they gave!
Really, excellent, fantastic job!

-Jason

Is this gonna get awkward

It was soooooooooooooooooo cute

Best Jeremie X Aelita kiss scene ever!

That was simply superb. The raw intimacy between Aelita and Jeremie was eloquently expressed, the passionate kiss, very tastefully written, and one of the best grasps on the depth of sensation Aelita must have felt upon coming to earth for the first time, such a comprehensive understanding of her initial reactions was evident here. A most excellent job.

nice. did a great job on explaining all the details and feelings she might get from being on earth for the first time. -Thumbs up-

Well, a couple of things, first off.

Thing the First. You had me from the first Paragraph of the entire story. I am a huge sucker for Jerlita.

Thing the Second. Well written emotion. You've nailed it with this story, so props for that. Moments that stick out are the discussion with Yumi about love, Aelita's confusion about simple things, and subtle emotional reactions now that Lyoko and XANA are gone, or at least no longer in use.

Thing the Third. Room for expansion. This allows any amount of sequels, as you do not actually mention the Supercomputer being shut down.

Thing the Forth. Small gripe, some out of character moments, mostly for Odd. Even after changes like what happened in this story, he is still well, "Odd" and I personally think that he would take it in stride.

Thing the Fifth. Good grasp on character thoughts and action, but a little lacking in world building. This is excusable, due to the fact that most if not all readers will be familar with Kadic.

Thing the Last. Jerlita Fluff. No more really needs said. Adorable, Sweet, Innocent, and overall fun to read.

Yours,

Dr. Jeremiah.

Dear Author

Your AU story is pretty. I wonder what will happen and how long it will last.

The quality is very good, good narration, humor, emotion, detail, drama, romance, interaction and dialog.

The character portrayal of Ulrich, Yumi, Odd, Aelita, Jeremy, Sissy and others are very good; flowing brilliantly.

The beginning with our Lyoko Heroes in the Real World and their brief run-in with Sissi was well written and amusing.

The following scenes with Jeremy and Aelita on a date were dynamic, full of depth, romance, complexity and detail.

The ending with Aelita spending the Night at Yumi’s place and asking Yumi questions about emotions; especially love were dynamic; full of depth and realism (particularly love and its complexity).

I do wonder what will happen with Xana, Jim and others in your AU.

The wholesome standards are high.

The language is clean.

Nothing is suggestively offensive.

No extreme violence or any other vile content.

I hope this review brightens your day. God bless.

Data Seeker

I like this so much already. That tiny bit of OddxSissy (they've always been my guilty pleasure, couple-wise, in Code Lyoko), Jeremie spending the day with Aelita, the kiss, you're a fantastic writer.

My one major complaint is Odd's personality. Yes, he's had his moments where he feels sympathy for Sissy, but I've never seen him actually feel bad about making fun of her.

Keep the chapters coming!

-StarIlI

Wow. This is absolutely stunning. Most writers how write this scenario just go with the default: "She felt the sun", "She looked at the sky", etc. But you wrote it as if it was the first time any of us had experienced it, through Aelita's eyes.

This is fantastic, and I can't wait to read the next chapter.

-StarIlI

Hi

This is a great chapter. I am interested in your AU fic and would like to see where it leads.

The quality is great in many areas; great narration, dialog, drama, emotion, detail, interaction and dialog. Also, it's good that you seldom use "said".

The paragraph and space are done well. Apart from a few spelling errors, the spelling is good.

The character portrayal was great; full of depth and complexity.

This fic seems to take place after between the episode where Aelia gets materialized. I wonder what will happen next.

The wholesome standards are high.

The language is clean.

Nothing is suggestively offensive.

No extreme violence or any other vile content.

I hope this review brightens your day. God bless.

Data Seeker

oh my word I loved it! It was so cool, and that story so gave me a boost for the rest of the week! Can't wait for more!

Everyone seems extraordinarily calm considering how completely ecstatic you'd think they'd be. Even more than that, they'd get ten times as excited because they're kids.

That said, this was great to read. Maybe it seemed a bit confused as to where it wanted to go, being the first chapter and all, but aside from that I enjoyed most of it.

..I did catch myself scrolling down a few words before the paragraph was finished. I'm somewhat distracted with my own stuff right now, but this still didn't capture my complete attention like a normal story would.

Still, on the whole, it was an enjoyable experience. I'll continue reading.