Hi – last review, I'm going to sleep after this ;)

This was, again, really well-done. My favourite line was probably: "He falls into a swirling black hole, then becomes blinded by an unknown light source." This was just such a wonderful way of describing a dream. Altogether, your vocabulary was brilliant, so many beautiful words were put in there; but it wasn't like you just mashed them in for the sake of it, your sentences were weaved beautifully and just made the whole thing so lovely. I loved the idea that Dominique is so far out of his reach, he can't even have her in his dreams.

Oh, and Dominique turning up in the library was a great touch, too – even when he doesn't dream about her, Scorpius can't get away frm her!

This was a really good start! I thought his fascination with her hair was a brilliant touch and I liked the way he dreamed of her at night and how you described Dominique in these dreams.

One thing I would say is that your format was a little confusing when Scorpius and Dominique had speeches on the same line and you couldn't tell who was talking, but this is easily fixable.

But your writing style is lovely and everything flowed extremely well. I enjoyed your chracterisation of Scorpius, too.

Also, I was wondering, why would Dominique have been given special permission to Floo into Hogwarts?

But this was a really good job so well done!

I honestly loved this. I'm a big fan of ScorpiusDominique! I liked Scorpius's fixation with her hair. Next generation Weasley hair interests me because I can never decide how ginger they're all going to be. I loved how Scorpius dreams of her and then he tries to escape and she's there. It was fab!

Great Job, and keep writing! :D

Aw, this was so cute!

I must say, I really love ScorpiusDominique, so no matter how you write them, they're always amyzing. But this was pretty much terrific! I loved how you wrote them, and I loved the fact that Scorpius dreamed of Dominique, and the way you characterised them- it was just terrific :)

Keep writing!