I'm so glad I ventured to read this. Now I know where your pen name came from!

What a fun, innocent display of affection from Ash to May in this Pokemon one shot. The ride into the clouds (done Pokemon-style) was a great way to solidify their friendship and showcase how far they've come. Thanks for sharing!

The ending of this was just like the magic carpet scene from Aladin. THAT'S MY FAVOURITE SCENE!

Aww... that was so sweet...

Cute

Where is pikachu? Other than that great story!

awwwww! they love eachother! :') haha

cute one but don't u think it was a bit dreamy...nah still cute... but where's pikachu,Max,Brock?

That's sweet. That season should have ended like that.

I'm not sure wat to say to this, so I'll just give u: 4.75/5! It was very sweet and it delivered it's emotions very well, even for a short one-shot.

Question: why the high rating? I don't think this qualifies as a "T"; it's a "K" fic as far as I can see.

Now, hmm... where have I seen something like this before... mentions of a magical ride in the sky for a happy young couple... a pauper who claims he's a prince, though the girl sees right through him... the boy holding out his hand to a love interest who is wary until he asks if she trusts him... I thought for sure it was a Disney movie... *coughALADDINcough* :D

I'm not an AdvanceShipper (I'm more of an advocate for PokeShipping and ContestShipping, actually), but this is a nice little story. Thumbs up.

Aw, that was really sweet! And everyone was totally in character and it was all fluffy and amazing. Great stuff!

cute, i like that you incorporated things from the episodes :)

...MUST RESIST...URGE TO...TROLL!...RESIST! DON't BE A DEMON...BE A DEVIL...DEMONS PURSUE EVIL AND WONTON DESTRUCTION WITHOUT PURPOSE, DEVILS WREAK HAVOC AND MISCHIEF TO ACHIEVE a PURPOSE...DONT BE A DEMON! WHaT iS THE PURPOSE IN TROLLING THIS?

The purpose is to illuminate and critique the realm of fanfiction in order to create a better form of fiction. In summation by trolling the writers we are not being demonic wolves that seek to eat the sheepish authors but rather be devilish snakes that bite at their heels to drive them in the right direction of authorship.

Sorry about the psychosis. Look Ash and May is a bs couple. Ash and Misty is the best combination for a simple reason. Ash is in a coma...The whole world he knows and we see on the show is a coma dream. If you are unfamiliar with this theory than see the link.. /2009/04/09/pokemon-explained/

The coma theory is worthy of being canon because it is the only way the story of pokemon can be made thought provoking. In accordance with that theory. Misty is the only real girl in this world. Long story short. Misty is the only real thing in Ash's world that he has an interest in. Here's to hopping the poor boy wakes up and go out and find out the piece of ass that defined his dreams...

I really liked the scene where he hands May his hoodie. That was really cute (and I'm not really good at spotting grammar issues, but I did find a few of them).

But what I really wanted to see was more description on their feelings. There's a lot of action, like sighing, blushing, looking away, smiling, etc. but what I'd like to see are the feelings behind it and imagery (that will really help your readers imagine what's going on and what they're feeling).

And I really liked the rose part (as much as I detest when Drew gives her them), I really liked Ash's reasoning behind it, haha!

I hope this helped! xD

Good fic, I liked it. Also, could you do a song fic for the song, 21st century breakdown by Green day( With the preferred ship advanceshipping).