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That’s not very canon Harry, talking about murdering Hermione :/

Well this story did a 180 out of nowhere with no buildup whatsoever. This had nothing to do with the rest of the story.

Ok, im just guessing but your are either a virgin male, a female who has never truly have gratifying sex or a guy who i both incompetent in bed and in capable of pleasing a female.

This story feels like it was written with out though. While better at creating the convocations at times it still quite flat.
You are rushing to fast trying to get to the bits you want without thinking about how it reads.

Like your comment about how people want you describe the journey harry went though in the forest, a time where you could have introduce your version of harry more organically and stil cut the others.

But this feel has the feel of a 13 year old guy writing.

P.S uk dues not have the USGS as that is the united states geographic society. Also they dont have blocks as there towns and cities grow organically and not planned out like the us.

Rhodey is a Death Eater?

Great story I really liked it good job writing it.

a rebound guy/girl is not owned by America high school students a lot of countries upper grade to university students use it too its been global for years mate oh and just to be clear I'm from England and a few friends (girls) have used me as a rebound not that I mind, mind you

Why did Harry not include any wards to prevent escape from Malfoy Manor? Narcissa should be dead. It is kind of sad that Harry isn't just with Daphne and Tracey. :/

There is nothing wrong with a girl climaxing really fast? Who cares if she does because you can just make her climax again...and again...and yet again. Lmao, are you sure you aren't a virgin?

Just one finger? That was some mild as hell torture. :c

Nah,... this is not for me.

Nothing is wrong. You completed which is good enough. Have kindness on yourself and grace.

Oooooooh,... nice cliffie, there there!

Whoa! Nice injection!

Golden Aegis hehehe... I'm an AoE fan too!