I wish you had put as much detail into the story as you did for this one lemon scene. Didn't really go with the tone of this story and calling her a bitch, even if it was during sex, was not appropriate after the way Seto treated Tea.
Wish Kaiba's redemption had been more meaningful, you skipped and rushed thru the plot letting us know he was broke and alone. Of course he was going to apologize and go back to Tea. He was broke and alone.
This story had potential, but it really needed some re editing. Hopefully, someday you will be able to rewrite this story and make it better.

And chapter three got erased too.

Okay, now I understand the long dialogue of Seth and Mokuba. So I'm guessing chapter two got erased.

Wow, somebody has daddy issues.
I don't know if you still check these reviews but, the timeline seems wrong. Did the fight in chapter one happen the day before or twelve years ago?
I get this story is to be dramatic, but the characters have really over the top blowups and really long speeches for dialogue. Reminds me of Spanish soap operas where the guy literally treats the girl like crap and then somehow time or a life threatening incident makes her forgive him.

What a good story! Thank you for writing it!

I really liked this, good ending... The lemon is also the best I have read so far, really good. Seto must also have good stamina. Though you have to be more clear in the timeline, I thought it was few months after Seto' s and Tea's fight, but find out that Seth is Seto's kid from 12 years later. You also have a couple chapters posted twice, chapters 10 and 11 are chapters 1 and 2 again. Your a good writer otherwise, do more work on Steo/Tèa works...

Awesome story! Very creative!(_)

Read and review my story, Where It All Begins sometime? That would be awesome!(_)

wowwwwwwwwww this story is very i love it. great job!

That was good and it got the happy ending it diserved

i'm glad they had a happy ending.

;-)