:D OMG I LOVED IT

I enjoyed the use of second person, as I don't see that a lot. And the errors were noticeable, but minor. They didn't change the meaning overall. I'd say, especially for your first experience writing in English, this was very well done.

Perfect :) loved it! Jeff and Annie are cute together even though I'm not a big fan of character/character pairups but this was adorable!

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Great job! Your english was fine...a lot of story in so little words. I really enjoyed it.