i was liking the story untill it became all about poor ranma he had it so hard only his pain matters

ranma brought 90% of his problems on to him self the entire cast are crazy you cant pick and choose what to tone done for a drama you have to tone it all down other wise your just character bashing

read the fucking manga ranma is a selfish little bastard most of the time and that was the joke ranma acts like every one is out to get him all while mkaing sure nothing changes going out of his way to make sure things stay the same

so yea if you want to do a comfort fic dont forget ranma has hurt others ( a prime example was how ranma shat all over akanes dream in the romeo and jullet arc and openly mocked her about it)

Pretty good but I think instead of surprising the adults I think you should have had Ranma pull out a package of Nannichuan then they both change before opening the door to make them think they did it backwards

I don't think you've established why Ranma, with a certificate of mastery, would be unable to get a job in just about any dojo in Japan. Or for that matter, as a bodyguard, or nightwatchman, or even applying to a police academy.

That aside, the first chapter is nicely written. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this.

It's pretty interesting (although depressing) so far, although I don't see why Ranma would run away without even trying to move back in with his parents first, nor do I see Cologne just handing out free training without getting something out of it for herself. I was worried when you said it would be a post-manga story based of the animé rather than the manga, but so far you've done a pretty good job of avoiding the tripfalls of such except for exaggerating just how often Akane hits Ranma.

Nabiki is such a hypocrite, and I'm surprised none of the others called her out on it. She herself treated Ranma worse than most of the others.

nice!work!

cant wait till the final chapter :)

even tho it probly dosent mean very much, i love these side stories, because it shows that they are still human and still part of the thing we all have, called life, haha

good story btw

Rather nicely done I am looking for more.

T-L-O-S-M comedy: Chaos reading a moment pointing at a certain line. "What does he mean we can't get pregnant?"

"I think that's just referring too our mirror half's male form no need too go ballistic sis'" Ranko said as she backed away from her alter half slowly.

~Zeltronica~

I love it!

"You look good in a tux for a girl!" Saotome Genma funny watching him fly into the koi pond turning into a panda.

Yea Voltor I still am reading your story between writing my works :)

Your fan ~Zeltronica~

No birth scene? Saving it for a side story?

"PILLOW!" hahahahahahaahhahahahaha... That was funny... Anywho, your story seems to be lacking some detail, not that there isn't any, but it would be nice for you to stop, then explain a little. If I may say, the characters are so much more realistic. Sometimes they sound too grown up, or Ranma just sounds stupid. Yours have a refreshing middle! Now on another note, your story makes me feel like I need to run a marathon! It's going from 0-60 in three seconds flat! Now I do understand that this is how you explained in the author notes how you were going to set it up. I would just like it if it was taken for a nice little cruise, stop and smell the roses, and when you do add some detal. That last part was just my own little opinion _, but over ALL, your doing a good job!

Smell the roses, have fun, and update soon,

Catarina _

Keep up the good work _

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You said this was your first fan fic right? Well you're doing an absolutely positutly good job! From your first chapter you've improved!

i love this story so far! please don't stop!

What's more when a pregnant womans belly is big enough, she can feel the baby kick. also carrying the baby around wears a pregnant woman out so she may take naps from time to time.