My god this is freaking brilliant! A really different take on the story, and I am enjoying it a lot. Very well written, you use some great language. Keep up the good work, this is awesome!

I'm willing to Beta.

Did you say you need a beta? Because I would looove to help. ;)

I love the way you write Mello so much. He's such an ass-hat. XD Matt is wonderfully brilliant, too; I think the "Knight in Tinted Goggles" line was my absolute favorite ever. Also, Caboose. Because I just found that so very Mello.

I love this story. Oh, how I love this story. :3

-Eggy

i likes it. I can't wait for more. The relationship is different from anything else ive seen for this pairing.

Love :)

Oops. FF.N spazzed out on me. XD Anyway, what I was trying to comment on was the awesome line about Mello and his chocolate. Also the mauve carpet.

I'm looking forward to seeing how this goes and am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

-Eggy

Oo, I like this. :D I love the cynical tone, and the causal, seemingly throw-away lines that actually have so much meaning. My favorites were the condom lines and the bit about Mell

I remember reviewing the first time around. So, again, I'll be keeping an eye on this. I'm still loving that 'mauve carpet' line.